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[AQ]

A Forgotten Fable

Relictus Fabula, a man with no memories, adventuring the Land of Trails, Periclitor.

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[amirhosseinb1]

I read your first chapter; it had a good story, a protest against corruption in society. However, in terms of descriptions, it was report-like in some places; you were telling more than showing. Although, this is my problem too. Overall, it's a good novel; continue with strength. By the way, if you can, would you give me your opinion about my novel?

 

[DearDire]

you're missing a lot of punctuation.

 

[AQ]

you're missing a lot of punctuation.

I'm sorry about that. I'm not very good at English.