Feedback wanted on this new comedy LitRPG

[danielnewwyn]

So I've written a story. It starts off simply as a joke, to see how far I can drive a story forward with nothing more than sheer ridiculousness. Here's what I've arrived at. Can any of y'all have a look and let me know what you think of this story? Thanks!

I am a Table [A LitRPG Progression Story]

When an ordinary man awakens in The Uninspiringly Named Medieval Realm, he expects the usual isekai treatment—powerful abilities, legendary weapons, maybe even a hero’s destiny. Instead, he finds himself in the most prestigious role imaginable. A wooden table. Featherwood, to be exact, which...

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[StoneInky]

I didn't read it because I have a dislike of Litrpg (most readers in Scribblehub are like that. You'll have better luck finding Litrpg lovers on RoyalRoad), but I'll just tell you my first impressions.

Cover looked cool. Synopsis told me what to expect, so that's nice.

Tags. You need more tags. At the very least, there should be a 'Nonhumanoid Protagonist' tag, and the 'Perverted Protagonist' tag if the story runs that way. You have a chapter called 'I love buttocks again' which sounds ecchi, but since there's no tags, I'm not sure.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

What is the Uninspiring Name (or is this a throwback to one of the earlier RPGs, "Spawn of Fashan" that came with a map including locations like "North, Where Melvin Last Stood")?
Kind of has the same vibe as Reborn as a Demon Hat | Scribble Hub