[Feedback Request] – Sci-Fi Novel (a mix of GOT+Dune) "We Who Outrun The End"

[J.Morikami]

Hi!
I'm J. Morikami, an indie author delving into the depths of sci-fi worldbuilding, political intrigue, and mythic legacies.

I’ve just launched the first two chapters of my newest novel:
We Who Outrun the End: The Chronicles of the Dynesties.
If you're into Dune, Foundation, or Game of Thrones in space, I’d love your feedback!

? What It’s About:

• Planetary wars
• Custom religions and cultures
• Interstellar diplomacy and betrayal
• Every House has an Ark Ship
  
  
  ? Current Status:
  • 2 chapters released
  • Part of a larger saga
  • Focused on building immersive lore, cultures, and political tension
  • Looking for early readers to help shape the tone, pacing, and clarity of worldbuilding

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  ? What I Need From You:
  I’d be super grateful for any feedback, especially:
  • Is the world intriguing or overwhelming?
  • Are the factions and houses readable and memorable?
  • Do the opening chapters hook you?
  • Any confusion, pacing issues, or info-dumps?
    
    

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    ? Read Here:
    Chapters 1 & 2
    
    

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    Thanks in advance to anyone who takes a look. ?
    If you're a fan of epic sci-fi with layers of history, power, and prophecy—this one's for you.
    Let the dynasties clash. Let the chronicles begin.
    
    — J. Morikami