PBJ_Time
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My story kinda has a bit of an emphasis of fight scenes and fleshing out the world through said fight scenes. You can check it out for reference.
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After some trial and error, I finally thought of a better outline that would expand my initial chapter count, which will also hopefully solve the massive pacing issue that everyone has told me about. Here's how the original outline looks like:
Essentially, the initial plot is hopping all over the place because I wanted to explore the second arc I had in mind, even though the main setting should be more fleshed out. So, I thought of a different outline to ease the story by a whole lot:
Please tell me what y'all think. I know it's pretty long, but it's finally time for me to flesh out the main setting instead of doing it for another in the current arc.
Beware the Horde [Isekai LitRPG]
New chapters every MWF, 8:00 PM EST. Also available on Royal Road. *** ~Too raw to live, too far to die.~ MMA fanatic and local champion Hajime Kato once thought the world was his oyster. Now, after his untimely death, he gets thrown into a new reality dominated by a game screen...
Hajime ends up on a battlefield full of billions of monsters, Vampire Survivors-style.
Hajime easily defeats with his new power but then gets trounced by the first boss.
Hajime explores the otherworld by walking around with his new friend, Farkas.
Hajime discovers finds out something sad about Farkas' old life within 5 minutes meeting each other (I know it's bad writing).
Hajime fights the monsters again with a teacher named Paulie.
Hajime defeats the first boss while breaking more sweat than he realized.
Hajime decides to do a steak-eating contest with Farkas and Paulie for the fun of it.
Hajime discovers he has a rival, who cuts him to pieces without fanfare.
Hajime respawns and realizes there are multiple worlds from the king.
Hajime easily defeats with his new power but then gets trounced by the first boss.
Hajime explores the otherworld by walking around with his new friend, Farkas.
Hajime discovers finds out something sad about Farkas' old life within 5 minutes meeting each other (I know it's bad writing).
Hajime fights the monsters again with a teacher named Paulie.
Hajime defeats the first boss while breaking more sweat than he realized.
Hajime decides to do a steak-eating contest with Farkas and Paulie for the fun of it.
Hajime discovers he has a rival, who cuts him to pieces without fanfare.
Hajime respawns and realizes there are multiple worlds from the king.
Hajime ends up on a battlefield full of billions of monsters, Vampire Survivors-style.
Hajime easily defeats with his new power but then gets trounced by the first boss.
Hajime explores the otherworld by walking around with his new friend,
Farkas.
Hajime discovers something about the way Farkas treats strangers, even those that are super rude.
More exploring.
Hajime sees a floating arena in the sky but decides to savor the moment with Farkas.
Even more exploring.
Hajime finds out something sad about Farkas' old life upon joining his "lone wolf dinner" at his apartment.
Hajime fights the monsters again with a teacher named Paulie.
Hajime defeats the first boss while breaking more sweat than he realized.
More exploring, this time through Paulie's personal tour of the inner machinations of the otherworld.
Hajime decides to do a steak-eating contest with Farkas and Paulie.
Hajime discovers he has a rival, who cuts him to pieces without fanfare.
Hajime respawns and is guided by Paulie through a hidden floor of the otherworld underground, teeming with training dummies of previous players.
Hajime learns what it means to be a player and picks a dummy that resembles his new rival.
Hajime gets his ass kicked but preserves after three thousand tries in one week.
Hajime proposes to his rival to fight at the floating arena.
Hajime gets his ass kicked.
Another training montage.
Hajime gets his ass kicked again, but at the last second, their rematch sends them out of the arena and crashing into multiple continents worth of cities in utter ruin until he finally wins with a headbutt.
Both get sent to the palace to meet the king to discuss their crimes, which involves finding out there are multiple worlds outside theirs.
Hajime easily defeats with his new power but then gets trounced by the first boss.
Hajime explores the otherworld by walking around with his new friend,
Farkas.
Hajime discovers something about the way Farkas treats strangers, even those that are super rude.
More exploring.
Hajime sees a floating arena in the sky but decides to savor the moment with Farkas.
Even more exploring.
Hajime finds out something sad about Farkas' old life upon joining his "lone wolf dinner" at his apartment.
Hajime fights the monsters again with a teacher named Paulie.
Hajime defeats the first boss while breaking more sweat than he realized.
More exploring, this time through Paulie's personal tour of the inner machinations of the otherworld.
Hajime decides to do a steak-eating contest with Farkas and Paulie.
Hajime discovers he has a rival, who cuts him to pieces without fanfare.
Hajime respawns and is guided by Paulie through a hidden floor of the otherworld underground, teeming with training dummies of previous players.
Hajime learns what it means to be a player and picks a dummy that resembles his new rival.
Hajime gets his ass kicked but preserves after three thousand tries in one week.
Hajime proposes to his rival to fight at the floating arena.
Hajime gets his ass kicked.
Another training montage.
Hajime gets his ass kicked again, but at the last second, their rematch sends them out of the arena and crashing into multiple continents worth of cities in utter ruin until he finally wins with a headbutt.
Both get sent to the palace to meet the king to discuss their crimes, which involves finding out there are multiple worlds outside theirs.