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[Author.eren]

I rewritten my novel. Review it and tell if it's better now.

The sovereign Ascendant

The Sovereign Ascendant

Eren stood at the peak of human achievement—richer than empires, stronger than nations, and feared by all. A man who conquered the world through sheer will, intelligence, and unrelenting ambition. Yet, in the end, his reward was nothing but emptiness. When he chose to leave that life behind...

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