Feedback for a first-time writer

[callmeRENGOKU]

Dungeon Invaders

If you like epic fantasy, with a touch of isekai and hard worldbuilding, go check Dungeon Invaders, it is only 3 chapters right now and would love some feedback as a newbie in this, this is my passionate project and i promise, it is going to be a wild ride.
(yes i hate synopsis lol)​

 

[YeshuasHeart]

Okay, I like the first three chapters already. They got me hooked on the story. For the beginning of Ch. 1, was Jody in Japan or another country? That's something that's never explained there. I also think the grammar needs to be reworked on; there are simply too many commas for non dialogue paragraphs and lack of commas and period replacements of periods at the end of dialogues. Not only that, but I think the bad guy's name Ruff is a terrible name that needs to be changed, and there needs to be more information about Jody at the end of Ch. 3. Is she fighting off the werewolves and transform them back to humans in order to save the village? Or will she just find Kat? That's all I got to say. Nice story though.