Feedback Exchange – Let’s Review Each Other

[Pinkvas]

Hey everyone)

I’m looking to get some solid feedback rolling on my story “The Promised Continent”. The prologue is fully finished, and I’d really appreciate your thoughts on it.

If you leave me an honest review, I’ll read the first 10 chapters of your story and give detailed feedback in return.

Story for review:

The Promised Continent

The Promised Continent – Action / Adventure/Fantasy


I’m asking you to read at least the first 10 chapters of my story — by chapter 10, the story really starts picking up, and that’s where I’d love your honest thoughts.

I’m curious about:

• What grabbed your attention in the prologue
• What could be stronger or clearer
• Any parts that felt confusing or slow

Your feedback will really help me shape the story as it moves forward!

Let’s help each other improve and get our stories noticed!

 

[Eldoria]

The novel's title and premise are quite promising, but the prologue is 17 chapters long—too long, my friend. If you're explaining lore, it's best to do it slowly, rather than immediately revealing it in the prologue.

 

[Pinkvas]

The novel's title and premise are quite promising, but the prologue is 17 chapters long—too long, my friend. If you're explaining lore, it's best to do it slowly, rather than immediately revealing it in the prologue.

Could you point out exactly where I was too hasty with the lore? It’s actually because of this that I can’t reveal most of the nuances in the descriptions yet — I’m gradually unfolding all the best parts. This also relates to the length of the prologue, as each Top, depending on the number of chapters, is planned to be roughly twice as long. I’ve always liked moderately paced stories for better immersion. But, as they say, so many people, so many opinio

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Could you point out exactly where I was too hasty with the lore? It’s actually because of this that I can’t reveal most of the nuances in the descriptions yet — I’m gradually unfolding all the best parts. This also relates to the length of the prologue, as each Top, depending on the number of chapters, is planned to be roughly twice as long. I’ve always liked moderately paced stories for better immersion. But, as they say, so many people, so many opinio

That is a good strategy for a print novel, where the reader has already invested in the work and has a vested interest in keeping going. It is generally, unless your skill at telling this part of the story is spellbinding, a terrible strategy for a webnovel where, if you don't grab the reader in the first chapter, you probably won't get a chance to grab them in the fifth.

 

[Pinkvas]

That is a good strategy for a print novel, where the reader has already invested in the work and has a vested interest in keeping going. It is generally, unless your skill at telling this part of the story is spellbinding, a terrible strategy for a webnovel where, if you don't grab the reader in the first chapter, you probably won't get a chance to grab them in the fifth.

That’s actually a really good piece of advice — and when you think about it, it really does make sense. I’m sincerely grateful for the food for thought, even though I had considered it before. The only thing that pushed me to publish the book on websites was the fact that knowing someone is reading it gives me motivation to fight through my endless laziness and keep writing. Sometimes I just forget how much I actually enjoy it

 

[ak47_1511]

https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1882292-kalki-the-ashes/
You can put a comment as a reminder. I would surely review your story.

 

[Eldoria]

Could you point out exactly where I was too hasty with the lore? It’s actually because of this that I can’t reveal most of the nuances in the descriptions yet — I’m gradually unfolding all the best parts. This also relates to the length of the prologue, as each Top, depending on the number of chapters, is planned to be roughly twice as long. I’ve always liked moderately paced stories for better immersion. But, as they say, so many people, so many opinio

The problem is, those chapters are more like a mini-arc than full-fledged prologues. Remember, a good prologue is one that has a hook to keep new readers reading.

If you label 17 chapters as prologues, new readers might be hesitant, especially since some readers tend to skip prologues because they don't seem to have much impact on the main story. Those are some opinions I've heard.

Personally, I write prologues as chapter 1, containing the arc's moral premise, which serves as a gateway to the story's main conflict. I tend to write concise prologues in one chapter, but they are dense and have ethical value.

I suggest you relabel the 17 chapters of prologues with the title of the mini-arc that those 17 chapters explain and add a chapter with the moral premise at the beginning of the chapter.

 

[Humanistheart]

The novel's title and premise are quite promising, but the prologue is 17 chapters long—too long, my friend. If you're explaining lore, it's best to do it slowly, rather than immediately revealing it in the prologue.

17 chapters of prologue? I though prologue was usually one small chapter like bit?

 

[Eldoria]

17 chapters of prologue? I though prologue was usually one small chapter like bit?

That's right, a good prologue should be written in 1 concise chapter that has a strong hook for the readers. Seventeen chapters for the prologue are more worthy of being called an introductory arc than a prologue.