Feed back in my First Story

[BioedwinMX]

I'm new to writing so I don't know a lot of things, so I looking for some feedback on the first chapters that I have written, anything will be appreciated it.

Magical Girl Revolution: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/375858/magical-girl-revolution/

Thanks in advance !!!

 

[gogo7966]

[Setting Inspired by "Looking up to magical girls"]

disapointed at the lack of a bdsm tag after that.

as this is gl i'm actually gonna read it so i'll come back to you in a few months.