I'm a new writer and have been told many times about my grammar so I know I'll get lots of that. My book is a LitRPG series. I would love to hear your opinions
Synopsis isn't coherent and lack clarity. First sentence reads like wannabe Nietzsche, too heavy for a webnovel synopsis. The "magical anomaly" sentence is too general and ambiguous. There is no engagement about the synopsis, reads like yet another litrpg. Sure, he will become "the one who Ruled The Universe", but what are his first steps? Where's the call for adventure? AI did it better:
In a world where memories are fleeting and the universe is vast, one man's journey begins at the edge of a cliff.
After dying on a cliff, Seth A. Gridd's soul is transported to a new world by a mysterious force. Stripped of his memories, Seth discovers a letter from himself that sets him on a path to explore unknown realms and uncover his destiny. Guided by this cryptic message, Seth embarks on an epic journey across parallel worlds, facing formidable challenges and discovering hidden powers. His ultimate goal: to become the ruler of the universe.
Read the first chapter, while the quality is good there's grammar errors and reads like stream of thoughts rather than structural one. Usual litrpg consumers will probably not look at it strangely but it buggers me, so I will not read it.
