Does this story aim too high for ScribbleHub? Honest feedback wanted!

[Dec]

• Is it because the writing is too serious?
• Does it fail to meet publish-level quality and also fail to be fun as a webnovel?
• Or maybe people here just prefer faster, lighter “webnovel style” stories?

I honestly don’t know.

It's because you are using AI for everything. From the story, past titles, to even forum posts.
Readers can tell and will drop this slop the moment they notice.
Do yourself, and everyone else, a favour and write with your own two hands, without relying on LLM for stuff.

 

[SevianMorric]

It's because you are using AI for everything. From the story, past titles, to even forum posts.
Readers can tell and will drop this slop the moment they notice.
Do yourself, and everyone else, a favour and write with your own two hands, without relying on LLM for stuff.

Yeah, the early draft had obvious AI skeletons—I won’t deny that.
That’s why I went back and fully rewrote Ch.1–5 myself. It actually feels like a novel now.
If you’re curious, give the revised chapters a shot. If not, no hard feelings.

It's because you are using AI for everything. From the story, past titles, to even forum posts.
Readers can tell and will drop this slop the moment they notice.
Do yourself, and everyone else, a favour and write with your own two hands, without relying on LLM for stuff.

Yeah, fair enough—the early draft definitely leaned on an LLM more than it should have. It was more of a rough brainstorming dump than a proper novel.

That’s why I went back and fully rewrote the first 5 chapters by hand. The pacing’s slower now, there’s more scene detail and character presence. It actually feels like a story instead of an outline.

I totally get that some readers drop the moment they sense AI influence. No argument there. But if you’re curious, I’d love for you to check the revised chapters before writing it off completely.

At the end of the day, it’s not about the tool—it’s about whether the story works.

 

[Dec]

If you’re curious, give the revised chapters a shot.

No, thank you.
Firstly, it's not my genre of interest.
Secondly, I don't want to read anything from an "author" who uses AI in their works. This is nothing else than lying to your readers. And, also, against the rules of this site.

 

[SevianMorric]

No, thank you.
Firstly, it's not my genre of interest.
Secondly, I don't want to read anything from an "author" who uses AI in their works. This is nothing else than lying to your readers.

Fair enough, thanks for being honest. I know this genre (and my process) isn’t for everyone.

 

[MindFudge]

Fair enough, thanks for being honest. I know this genre (and my process) isn’t for everyone.

Honestly im not sure why you used ai for the forum post. Your in a forum full of writers, so your not doing urself any favours. My honest opinion is to just restart, choose a different story because (assuming its still the same story), is waaaay to controversial. As a british (catholic), the topic hits my soul. So just do another story that wont create such a divide and do not use ai.
Or continue, but use a different platform that leans into your ideals.

Dont get me wrong, u can use ai to correct your spelling and punctuation and find synonyms for idk, 'scrambled'. Your a writer, not an editor. But using it to write anything at all is bad for u, as an author. You wont learn to write using ai. Trust and believe.

Idk about making a new account. Could do if its not against the rules. Or you could own up to your mistakes and try again. Gl

 

[SevianMorric]

Honestly im not sure why you used ai for the forum post. Your in a forum full of writers, so your not doing urself any favours. My honest opinion is to just restart, choose a different story because (assuming its still the same story), is waaaay to controversial. As a british (catholic), the topic hits my soul. So just do another story that wont create such a divide and do not use ai.
Or continue, but use a different platform that leans into your ideals.

Dont get me wrong, u can use ai to correct your spelling and punctuation and find synonyms for idk, 'scrambled'. Your a writer, not an editor. But using it to write anything at all is bad for u, as an author. You wont learn to write using ai. Trust and believe.

Idk about making a new account. Could do if its not against the rules. Or you could own up to your mistakes and try again. Gl

Thank you for being honest.

To be truthful, before I even started writing this, I already understood and agreed with many of your concerns. But at the same time, I felt that avoiding the topic wouldn’t make it disappear—it felt worth exploring, even knowing it might not be for everyone.

I realize this subject is sensitive, especially here. It was always intended as a speculative “what-if” scenario rather than a statement of belief, but I understand it won’t resonate with all readers.

Regarding AI, you make a fair point. I’m still learning how to use it responsibly—mostly for editing and improving clarity, rather than replacing my own writing. Looking back, I see that in a forum full of writers, I should have made that distinction clearer from the start.

I really appreciate you taking the time to explain your view. I’ll take your advice seriously—whether it means finding a better platform for this theme, or adjusting how I approach it here. Thank you again for sharing your perspective.

Honestly im not sure why you used ai for the forum post. Your in a forum full of writers, so your not doing urself any favours. My honest opinion is to just restart, choose a different story because (assuming its still the same story), is waaaay to controversial. As a british (catholic), the topic hits my soul. So just do another story that wont create such a divide and do not use ai.
Or continue, but use a different platform that leans into your ideals.

Dont get me wrong, u can use ai to correct your spelling and punctuation and find synonyms for idk, 'scrambled'. Your a writer, not an editor. But using it to write anything at all is bad for u, as an author. You wont learn to write using ai. Trust and believe.

Idk about making a new account. Could do if its not against the rules. Or you could own up to your mistakes and try again. Gl

Thank you for being honest.

I do understand why this topic feels sensitive—especially here. It was always meant as an experimental “what-if,” not a statement of belief. I realize it won’t resonate with everyone, and that’s okay.

But if I may share one line from my protagonist, which also reflects why I chose to write this story at all:

“Rather than fearing or resisting inevitable trends, it’s better to create a new order—to responsibly shape and guide them.”

I suppose that’s what I’m trying to do here in a small way, even knowing it won’t please everyone. I still appreciate you taking the time to share your perspective.

 

[MindFudge]

Thank you for being honest.

To be truthful, before I even started writing this, I already understood and agreed with many of your concerns. But at the same time, I felt that avoiding the topic wouldn’t make it disappear—it felt worth exploring, even knowing it might not be for everyone.

I realize this subject is sensitive, especially here. It was always intended as a speculative “what-if” scenario rather than a statement of belief, but I understand it won’t resonate with all readers.

Regarding AI, you make a fair point. I’m still learning how to use it responsibly—mostly for editing and improving clarity, rather than replacing my own writing. Looking back, I see that in a forum full of writers, I should have made that distinction clearer from the start.

I really appreciate you taking the time to explain your view. I’ll take your advice seriously—whether it means finding a better platform for this theme, or adjusting how I approach it here. Thank you again for sharing your perspective.

Thank you for being honest.

I do understand why this topic feels sensitive—especially here. It was always meant as an experimental “what-if,” not a statement of belief. I realize it won’t resonate with everyone, and that’s okay.

But if I may share one line from my protagonist, which also reflects why I chose to write this story at all:

“Rather than fearing or resisting inevitable trends, it’s better to create a new order—to responsibly shape and guide them.”

I suppose that’s what I’m trying to do here in a small way, even knowing it won’t please everyone. I still appreciate you taking the time to share your perspective.

Firstly, no problem, this is a free world (mostly), do what pleases you. The em dashes are killing my soul tho xD. Tbh I think it would be a story I'd read if not for the connotations I keep getting. That's probably a me issue, but I am technically part of the reader base, so...

Also, I really, and I mean, REALLY see a couple of things in your response I don't want to talk about for the sake of peace. But I feel as though you're not aware. Just be careful how you phrase things; some people take things too personally for no reason at all.
(FYI; this isn't hate)

 

[SevianMorric]

Firstly, no problem, this is a free world (mostly), do what pleases you. The em dashes are killing my soul tho xD. Tbh I think it would be a story I'd read if not for the connotations I keep getting. That's probably a me issue, but I am technically part of the reader base, so...

Also, I really, and I mean, REALLY see a couple of things in your response I don't want to talk about for the sake of peace. But I feel as though you're not aware. Just be careful how you phrase things; some people take things too personally for no reason at all.
(FYI; this isn't hate)

Thank you for saying this kindly—I really appreciate it.

I’ll definitely watch my use of em dashes; I realize they can be overwhelming in large chunks of text. I’ll try to balance them better.

As for the connotations and phrasing—I understand some parts of this theme can feel heavy or sensitive. I don’t want to make anyone uncomfortable, so I’ll keep reflecting on how I present it.

If you ever feel like sharing which parts stood out (even in very broad terms), I’d be grateful—it might help me avoid unintended issues later. But no pressure, of course.

 

[MindFudge]

Thank you for saying this kindly—I really appreciate it.

I’ll definitely watch my use of em dashes; I realize they can be overwhelming in large chunks of text. I’ll try to balance them better.

As for the connotations and phrasing—I understand some parts of this theme can feel heavy or sensitive. I don’t want to make anyone uncomfortable, so I’ll keep reflecting on how I present it.

If you ever feel like sharing which parts stood out (even in very broad terms), I’d be grateful—it might help me avoid unintended issues later. But no pressure, of course.

Nah, don't worry about the connotations. Iv learnt to keep politics and religion out of my conversations. You come off just fine. Most people here have more than 2 braincells (I think)
But yea, gl with your story!

 

[SevianMorric]

Nah, don't worry about the connotations. Iv learnt to keep politics and religion out of my conversations. You come off just fine. Most people here have more than 2 braincells (I think)
But yea, gl with your story!

Haha, fair point—keeping politics and religion out of casual talk is probably the secret to long life on the internet.

And yes, I’d like to believe most people here have at least three braincells… but I won’t test that theory. ?

Thanks again for the good wishes—may your reading list never run out of hidden gems!

 

[Tsuru]

First, blatant use of LLM in your responses. Once or twice I understand, but using to everything and anything shows that you're either lazy as hell or trying so hard to sound like a professional that your credibility is already low even before I open the first chapter. Second, when I opened the first chapter, I was met with this:
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It's basically ChatGPT prompts stacked together that somehow try to resemble a story. Sure, maybe some people have kinks for such storytelling that makes them to love these short sentences with "this is not X, it's Y" in their stories, but I don't have it. Sure, it's great in rhetoric, in trying to persuade someone, but in storytelling such rhetorical techniques makes you look either like The ButlerGPT or a dumb consumer of LLM generated text, that you forgot what makes storytelling good enough to pass as authentic. I don't see any authenticity in these sentences.

How sentences are written, how they're stylized, how they show the world outside the words makes the story great. I don't see none in this. Because The Butler with his Dao Of Efficiency showing his ugly face, I can't take it seriously. I can't take YOU seriously too, because all I see is either some teenager drunk on LLM powah or deliberate agent who wants to test the gullibility of people to LLM. Also, once the credibility of your storytelling is broken, with deliberately bad descriptions due to maximum word efficiency that The Butler does, readers who know him will 100% bail in the first chapter. You didn't even remove the blatant titles the LLM does in the chapters, what are you doing? If you're using LLM at least try to make it presentable, not just copy and pasting the damn text. I give you F for failing the basic LLM obfuscation techniques. If you cheat, cheat well without no one noticing.

God............

Even without the app, i saw with a glance its AI.
How ?
I received a great-truthful tip from someone(randomguy comment) saying : There is [—] in the words.

"There is NO ONE. Fucking NO ONE in the goddamn world that use — when they type, so yes its a bot"
(warning that social medias have thousands and thousands of bots, and they can swear-insult too btw)

 

[CharlesEBrown]

"There is NO ONE. Fucking NO ONE in the goddamn world that use — when they type, so yes its a bot"
(warning that social medias have thousands and thousands of bots, and they can swear-insult too btw)

I used to, back when I had a lot of the ASCII codes memorized and just held down the "ALT" key and typed in the code for it when I wanted one. Also the degree sign and four or five other symbols. But that was over 20 years ago.

 

[Tsuru]

I used to, back when I had a lot of the ASCII codes memorized and just held down the "ALT" key and typed in the code for it when I wanted one. Also the degree sign and four or five other symbols. But that was over 20 years ago.

wow knowledge +1

also you proved my point too, thx ("But that was over 20 years ago.")

 

[SevianMorric]

God............

Even without the app, i saw with a glance its AI.
How ?
I received a great-truthful tip from someone(randomguy comment) saying : There is [—] in the words.

"There is NO ONE. Fucking NO ONE in the goddamn world that use — when they type, so yes its a bot"
(warning that social medias have thousands and thousands of bots, and they can swear-insult too btw)

Funny thing is—AI loves em dashes because they mimic how humans actually pause and shift thought. So in a weird way, the more “AI” it looks, the more it’s just mirroring our natural speech.

But yeah, I get it—on forums, people usually type quick and loose, so it stands out. I’ll sprinkle them more carefully next time. ?