Could someone give me feedback on my first two chapters?

[Heroofgoof]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/386888/the-changed--a-system-apolycalyse-litrpg/
If someone could give me feedback on my book that would be amazing.
Thx in advance.

 

[Lloyd]

You need to play around with your tables a little if you paste them into SH. Yours have no boarders between the boxes so it looks kinda bad.

 

[Arthur-67]

Id advise removing the double spaces between the lines and reworking the synopsis as at the moment it doesn't quite pique my interest

 

[Heroofgoof]

Id advise removing the double spaces between the lines and reworking the synopsis as at the moment it doesn't quite pique my interest

Is it better now?

 

[Arthur-67]

Yes