Could someone give me feedback on my first two chapters?

Lloyd

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You need to play around with your tables a little if you paste them into SH. Yours have no boarders between the boxes so it looks kinda bad.
 

Arthur-67

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Id advise removing the double spaces between the lines and reworking the synopsis as at the moment it doesn't quite pique my interest
 
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