CHECK OUT BOYS GANG.

[Sunsetinapainting]

Could you please check out my novel boys gang.here is the link. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2063982/boys-gang/
I would really appreciate some feedback on my latest chapters.
It would.be nice if someone tells me what they think of my novel

 

[Daeron]

I read your latest chapters, well I could tell you want to make it sound more Comics-like story. The dynamic between MC and his butler(?) Xavier quite good. Xavier was clearly overworked and MC quite chaotic, typical teenage boys.

But, this is my opinion, I need to read it 3 times to understand the plot, before i realized, there's no plot in this story.
You didn't make the plot yet aren't you?

You got good idea about the dynamics or how should a teenage boy act. But if you write without proper plot, the reader will be lost easily.
Let me suggest you some manga with strong slice of life element, the title is Ichigo 100%. It was completely teenager slice of life but the plot and character development was very good.