Chapter Feedback?

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

O mighty one, could you kindly spare a few minutes to give feedback on the following chapter:

Creature Feature - Chapter 8: The Schism | Scribble Hub

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Much obliged by the way

 

[DismaiNaim]

I made it about ⅔ through and gave up.

I really liked the beginning. You painted the scene very well. I felt like I was in the world, seeing everything.

Then I guess he was in some sort of dream? I got lost about what was going on, and after a while it just kinda kept going and not going anywhere.

 

[HellsPerfectSpawn]

I made it about ⅔ through and gave up.

I really liked the beginning. You painted the scene very well. I felt like I was in the world, seeing everything.

Then I guess he was in some sort of dream? I got lost about what was going on, and after a while it just kinda kept going and not going anywhere.

Cheers, I'll take that criticism with a stiff upper lip.

Much obliged.


PS: Yes a sort of dreamscape meeting aspects of the self. Just all those aspects are very real and physical in their own way.