Can someone

[Notadate]

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This isn’t a grammar mistake hunt. Don’t want this to be popular. I just need a few people to read this, and give me some words that are better than fall. Paul has giving me advice and I am going to put that in v.2 after I finish the prologue. You can tell where I am write when you see (), because I am either rewriting or adding more to the sentence.


(Currently reworking the ending of the chapter to fit my idea of dream-like soul state)

 

[ACertainPassingUser]

Someone can,

Do you mean a person or a human can ?

Spoiler: [Warning] Literal Human Can [DISTURBING]

 

[Iamnotabot]

Someone can,

Do you mean a person or a human can ?

Spoiler: [Warning] Literal Human Can [DISTURBING]

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In practicality using human as a flesh can is a waste of organic matter.

You have the same value doing to a ape or a chimp. Just put them into a vats and plug some cord into them, you know ? the old fashion ways.

 

[HelloHound]

If you really, genuinely must use human matter then I think it'd be more practical to use the leather for clothing, furniture and accessories; using it for a can seems impractical and a poor internal insulator so not only would the customer get a strange texture when they put their mouth on it to drink, unless it was specifically reinforced it would be essentially a meat bag full of lukewarm to hot drink, flopping around every which way

 

[ThrillingHuman]

In practicality using human as a flesh can is a waste of organic matter.

You have the same value doing to a ape or a chimp. Just put them into a vats and plug some cord into them, you know ? the old fashion ways.

If you really, genuinely must use human matter then I think it'd be more practical to use the leather for clothing, furniture and accessories; using it for a can seems impractical and a poor internal insulator so not only would the customer get a strange texture when they put their mouth on it to drink, unless it was specifically reinforced it would be essentially a meat bag full of lukewarm to hot drink, flopping around every which way

me, who doesn't think about practicality but uses these while pretending they cry when I pour stuff out of them:

 

[HelloHound]

me, who doesn't think about practicality but uses these while pretending they cry when I pour stuff out of them:

well, I suppose it's better to think the can is crying as opposed to some other excretion

 

[Syringe]

would the customer get a strange texture when they put their mouth on it to drink, unless it was specifically reinforced it would be essentially a meat bag full of lukewarm to hot drink, flopping around every which way

I've fixed this with V2

Spoiler: Abomination Can V2

 

[Aaqil]

I feel like these images break many rules,
If not forum, then social ones,

 

[Midnight-Phantom]

my eyes ..

moving this up here. PLEASE READ ? , here is a cookie ?


The link


This isn’t a grammar mistake hunt. Don’t want this to be popular. I just need a few people to read this, and give me some words that are better than fall. Paul has giving me advice and I am going to put that in v.2 after I finish the prologue. You can tell where I am write when you see (), because I am either rewriting or adding more to the sentence.


(Currently reworking the ending of the chapter to fit my idea of dream-like soul state)

Woo there! I see you're writing your first novel. Congratulations! welcome to the club.

Now for your query, I think you are talking about dialect? or grammar? no matter what dialect you use, someone out there will always understand you. But on the flip side, some people won't understand you at all. So, the best choice is to write in the dialect that you're familiar with and what's trending.

For example, I'm an Indian guy, but I write in US English. I do this because I know that US English is a widely understood language. Even if some people don't understand all of the terms I use, they'll still be able to follow the story.

If you're having trouble deciding which dialect to use, I recommend looking for some videos and guides online. There are plenty of resources available that can help you make the right decision.

As for structuring your story, that's a whole other topic! There are many different ways to structure a novel, so it's important to find a method that works for you. Again, there are plenty of resources available online that can help you with this.

Same for grammes too. or you can also use some tools out there if you are on a PC and using MS Word or google one just press F7 which will give you all the errors word by word, or you can use Grammarly a tool that fixes all, or use some ai tools like Bard from google or Chat GPT.

The most important thing is to not reinvent the wheel. If there's a popular way to structure a novel, there's probably a good reason for that. So, don't be afraid to use the tried-and-true methods.

Good luck with your novel! I hope you find this advice helpful.

 

[Notadate]

my eyes ..

Woo there! I see you're writing your first novel. Congratulations! welcome to the club.

Now for your query, I think you are talking about dialect? or grammar? no matter what dialect you use, someone out there will always understand you. But on the flip side, some people won't understand you at all. So, the best choice is to write in the dialect that you're familiar with and what's trending.

For example, I'm an Indian guy, but I write in US English. I do this because I know that US English is a widely understood language. Even if some people don't understand all of the terms I use, they'll still be able to follow the story.

If you're having trouble deciding which dialect to use, I recommend looking for some videos and guides online. There are plenty of resources available that can help you make the right decision.

As for structuring your story, that's a whole other topic! There are many different ways to structure a novel, so it's important to find a method that works for you. Again, there are plenty of resources available online that can help you with this.

Same for grammes too. or you can also use some tools out there if you are on a PC and using MS Word or google one just press F7 which will give you all the errors word by word, or you can use Grammarly a tool that fixes all, or use some ai tools like Bard from google or Chat GPT.

The most important thing is to not reinvent the wheel. If there's a popular way to structure a novel, there's probably a good reason for that. So, don't be afraid to use the tried-and-true methods.

Good luck with your novel! I hope you find this advice helpful.

No, it didn’t. I’ve been told this multiple times. (But this is appreciate, even if I’ve heard it before)

I was asking for someone (A physical Homosapien) to read and tell me how it feels. I am a native English speaker, and I have my style of writing down, multiple for the genre I wish to portray.


Need someone to read and also tell me what sentences feel janky, or give more better words than fall.