Can someone review this Chuunibyou chapter?

[Solstice1309]

While I’ve asked the same thing at the end of the chapter, I’ve had no luck.

This chapter is basically from the FL’s pov and I wanted to know where I can improve upon it.

The dialogue, the wording, certain phrases and even the technicalities such as text format.

The link to the chapter is here -> Chuunibyou GF - Chapter 6

 

[KiraMinoru]

All I feel is pain. If that’s what you were going for then good job I guess.

Btw, the lack of capitalization for the start of sentences in just this character’s dialogue is just weird. Might just be a me thing though.