Can anyone give some of their thoughts about my story?

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I would appreciate what you think of this story. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1019722/age-of-spirit-fantasycultivation/

 

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Usually, people say "Did I hit my head too hard?" instead of hitting my head too strong.

I see, thank you for your suggestion. I'll change it immediately! :D