Brutally honest Feedback?

[WhaleSprite]

I've been hesitant about asking for this because I have a pretty huge fear of rejection, but I know my story isn't going to have improvement if I keep wanting to be on the safe side. I've done some editing in more recent days, thanks to one friend but she reads rather slowly and is pretty busy so feedback from her can take up to weeks at a time. I have been asking Chatgpt to be more brutally honest these days with me about my work, but sometimes I feel like I have to fight with it not to turn my novel into a melodrama. So, I'd really like to hear honest feedback from actual people. Here's my story link.
Lucky God System

 

[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

I think your story is dope and I'm not the type to point out flaws unless it's painfully obvious.

Sprite, I believe in you and I hope you continue to strive for glory.

 

[WhaleSprite]

I think your story is dope and I'm not the type to point out flaws unless it's painfully obvious.

Sprite, I believe in you and I hope you continue to strive for glory.

Thank you! I'll try my best