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Dajoe1234

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What do you think of my blurb? Does it entice you to read this story if you're into smut?

Johnny is a singer and wants to earn a billion dollar.
He will meet Kat Reid and Hannah Ivanova and fall in love with them. . Margo is Johnny best friend and wants to help him out.
On his way to earning a billion dollar, Johnny will live a lot of adventures, both sexual and non-sexual. Such as fucking and dating two girls at the same time, getting his tv stolen, and almost being raped.

He also will have to face the wrath of Christian America that will do everything to sabotage his Throuple with the girls.

Excerpt:
Lupe smiled. "We've got your sex tape, Johnny. I always knew something was off with you. You're not a real Christian."
Johnny frowned. "Neither are you"
Lupe laughed. "What would happen if Reverend Pawn found out that his Christian rockstar is fucking girls before marriage? And not just one but two."

Read the Life of Johnny Smith to find out how he'll manage to overcome his demons, internals and externals.
The version published will be the first draft, your feedback is appreciated.
 

RepresentingCaution

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I recommend using a question to entice readers.
Example:
How will he face the wrath of Christian America doing everything to sabotage his Throuple with the girls?
 
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