Attempt on Micro fiction

[cheriechechan]

Hello everyone!
I'm a newbie in here and this is my very, very first attempt of micro fiction story.
As an aspiring author your comments, reactions and etc. are highly appreciated.
Enjoy Reading and Thank you.

Title: ‘Unsolved’

They finally found the murder weapon; a kitchen knife covered with red blood.
"Officer, I swear it wasn't me!" said He, pleading his innocence to thee.
"Officer, it wasn't me either!" said She, pleading for mercy to thee.
Confused as hell, the officer scratched his head in incredulity.​

 

[Cipiteca396]

Obviously it was the butler.

Or the Officer.

 

[greyblob]

pleading his innocence to thee.

Confused as hell

those don't fit together

 

[ThrillingHuman]

covered with red blood.

 

[Renaxan]

One pleading for innocence. One pleading for mercy. Why they are pleading in the first place? Panic? If they weren't the actual murderer, they should play it cool.


Alright officer, Just catch both of them.

 

[Agentt]

It was the author all along

 

[cheriechechan]

Thank you for the response. Will also consider this during the editing.

It was the author all along

If I were the officer I would highly suspect 'She'.

One pleading for innocence. One pleading for mercy. Why they are pleading in the first place? Panic? If they weren't the actual murderer, they should play it cool.


Alright officer, Just catch both of them.

Aw you rewrote it. Thanks but If I were the officer I would highly suspect 'She'.
Thank you for the response. Will also consider this during the editing.

those don't fit together

Thank you for the response. Will also consider this during the editing.

Obviously it was the butler.

Or the Officer.

Thanks but If I were the officer I would highly suspect 'She'.

Hello everyone!
I'm a newbie in here and this is my very, very first attempt of micro fiction story.
As an aspiring author your comments, reactions and etc. are highly appreciated.
Enjoy Reading and Thank you.

Title: ‘Unsolved’

They finally found the murder weapon; a kitchen knife covered with red blood.
"Officer, I swear it wasn't me!" said He, pleading his innocence to thee.
"Officer, it wasn't me either!" said She, pleading for mercy to thee.
Confused as hell, the officer scratched his head in incredulity.​

Thank you for the reactions. t If I were the officer I would highly suspect 'She'.

 

[Amok]

Maybe "A kitchen knife covered in dried/dripping/congealed blood." or "A kitchen knife dripping blood, crimson shining over steel."
Crimson is nice if you really want to describe its coloration.

: P

 

[cheriechechan]

Maybe "A kitchen knife covered in dried/dripping/congealed blood." Crimson is nice if you really want to describe its coloration.

: P

Thank you for your response. Will try this on my other stories later.