Anyone willing to give me some feedback?

[ModernGold7ne]

Exactly as asked above, I've got 15k words split between 12 chapters, I want to know if my story is actually developing well.
I'm willing to reciprocate, if required.

Edit: Not a litrpg, but a true high fantasy.

Anima Aliena

A starless sky lit by clouds, plants of every colour, and a once dead old man astounded by it all. Meeting an entity that he was too stupid to believe or comprehend, having his very soul tampered with, then waking up in a relatively tiny body that was very different...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Deleted member 54065]

Would love to help you (even if you don't read mine; I just love giving feedbacks) but litRPG isn't my thing. ?

 

[ModernGold7ne]

Would love to help you (even if you don't read mine; I just love giving feedbacks) but litRPG isn't my thing. ?

It isn't a litrpg, I don't like it when numbers take precedent over a story.

 

[Deleted member 54065]

It isn't a litrpg, I don't like it when numbers take precedent over a story.

I mean, game-y. Read your first chapter, and while I have no qualms about the flow, it just won't 'sink' with me due to the game elements.

But your first chapter is good. The problem lies with my preferences.

 

[ModernGold7ne]

I mean, game-y. Read your first chapter, and while I have no qualms about the flow, it just won't 'sink' with me due to the game elements.

But your first chapter is good. The problem lies with my preferences.

Oh, ok, should put a note saying that the rest of the story has a more traditional style.

Regardless, thanks for giving it a shot.

 

[Deleted member 54065]

Oh, ok, should put a note saying that the rest of the story has a more traditional style.

Regardless, thanks for giving it a shot.

No probs. Sorry I wasn't of any help.