Anybody want to share feedback?

[Ghostofz]

I've written three chapters so far but I will be glad for any feedback. I can also give feedback if you want as well.

 

[BLIGHT_ZERO]

I've written three chapters so far but I will be glad for any feedback. I can also give feedback if you want as well.

sure. link the story.

 

[Ghostofz]

Thanks! https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1275533/thieves-of-tomorrow/

 

[PBJ_Time]

I'd love to, and if it's not too much to ask, I'd also love for a feedback swap because I posted my own story an hour ago. It's not approved yet, but I can wait. What do you say?

Beware the Horde [Isekai LitRPG]

New chapters every MWF, 8:00 PM EST. Also available on Royal Road. *** ~Too raw to live, too far to die.~ MMA fanatic and local champion Hajime Kato once thought the world was his oyster. Now, after his untimely death, he gets thrown into a new reality dominated by a game screen...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Ghostofz]

Hey I really liked how you added pictures and used text boxes for the skills. I think that was a solid first chapter!

 

[PBJ_Time]

Hey I really liked how you added pictures and used text boxes for the skills. I think that was a solid first chapter!

Good morning. I also think you wrote a solid first chapter, too. I didn't expect a superhero story, but it was appreciated. The way you made your MC's monologuing pretty quirky kinda reminds me of my previous drafts. Some of your paragraphs were a bit of a wall of text to read through, so I suggest you work on that. Still, great work. ?

 

[Ghostofz]

Thank you!

 

[Zenomew]

Here is mine

This Sect is too much

The Sect leader who wants nothing more than a slow life Disciples who are hidden dragons and tigers Elders who are too many to bother counting Elder Wu :- Sect leader about our new elder...she is only four years old Sect leader:- How high is your cultivation again?...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[2wordsperminute]

Thanks! https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1275533/thieves-of-tomorrow/

The blurb doesn't really say enough in my opinion.

 

[PuffyPencil]

Hello! May I also participate? I have already published five chapters here in scribble hub. May I get some feedback from the lovely people here? I will also do my best to review your stories

@Ghostofz I already posted my review to your story. Good luck!

The Way of the Shaman

(https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1273172/the-way-of-the-shaman/)

Synopsis:
It’s more than twenty years after the new millenium. Amid the rising skyscrapers, recent housing developments, public transport modernization programs, and new generation of influencers and vloggers, are constants in the Philippines’ society - the shamans.

In this alternate world, Filipino mythological creatures intermingle in peace with humans. A tiyanak is a child star. A sarimanok the mascot of a popular channel. A manananggal is a sought-after model. Even diwatas and sigbins are leaders of their own partylists.

But even in this highly inclusive world, there are those who tiptoe beyond the line - be it humans or mythological creatures. The shamans who wield sigla, also known as spiritual energy, are responsible for keeping the peace between the supernatural beings and humankind.

Within this chaotic setting, Billie, a tired, depressed young woman, tries to get back on her feet together with Puddle, the duwende. Maybe life in the country is not so peaceful after all?


Thank you!!!!