Any tips for writing a story synopsis?

[TheTaintedOne]

Here's the synopsis for my epic fantasy novel. I have tried to establish the core character conflict in this character-driven synopsis. The title for the story is 'The Dragon's Blood'.

Spoiler: Synopsis

"I am Einar, and I am not a demon."

In a world where crimson eyes are feared as the mark of an old witch and demons that once ravaged the land, Einar carries more than just a legacy of suspicion. Every night, he relives the death of a man he has never met, fighting battles with skills he should not possess, walking on land he had never known. His hands remember the weight of a sword, his heart longs for a woman whose face he cannot recall.

These are not dreams. They are memories, vivid and relentless, pulling him toward a truth buried in his blood and soul. As the forgotten past begins to take over, Einar must uncover the identity of the ghost within him and face the violent history that refuses to stay buried.

Spoiler: New One

"How much will you sacrifice to reclaim what was never yours?"

For centuries, the world of men has sheltered safely behind a secret pact forged when darkness ruled and enslaved men. Now the pact lies shattered, broken by the very men who foolishly believed they could control what their ancestors had rightfully feared. From the forbidden lands, a nightmare awakens: a witch who whispers deadly promises of power beyond mortal reach. The age of war is coming.
In the northern wilds, young Einar fights a war within himself. His crimson eyes mark him as the witch's spawn, a demon cursed from birth. Whispers follow his every step, but being an outcast is the least of his torments.
Each night, dreams consume him. He relives an ancient warrior's death, fights with skills that are not his, and longs for a woman he's never met. The warrior's memories bleed into his waking hours, claiming his thoughts, his actions, his very identity until he fears the face in the mirror is no longer his own.
But when Einar finally discovers the truth behind these haunting memories, can he reclaim his stolen life, or will he be dragged towards a destiny where only death awaits?

Any tips would be much appreciated, from world-level conflict to side plot conflict. Note that for Einar (Mc), this is a core conflict that would throw him into the world and major conflicts for which some can even say... his destiny.

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1749236/the-dragons-blood/

 

[SeaJay]

To me it reads like a run-on sentence. I would suggest take out the dialogue completely, and revamp the synopsis structure. Because I can't get myself to read the synopsis. If I can't understand your hook, then I won't read your story.
For example, you start with "In a world where crimson eyes are feared as the mark of an old witch and demons that once ravaged the land, Einar carries more than just a legacy of suspicion. Every night, he relives the death of a man he has never met, fighting battles with skills he should not possess, walking on land he had never known. His hands remember the weight of a sword, his heart longs for a woman whose face he cannot recall.". That is very long-winded and gives no real detail. I would like something like "Einar has crimson eyes, and for that he is feared. He is persecuted as the mark of witches and demons of old that once ravaged the lands." and stuff like that. More sensory details, show-not-tell, that kind of thing.

 

[Axiweave]

I’m pretty new so I’m not sure if I’m qualified to say this, but a tip is to give a lot of info about your opening chapter and general story in your synopsis. Kind of like a spoiler. It probably sounds weird if you’re new, but it hooks readers that are actually interested and keeps away those that aren’t. Don’t try to make your synopsis generally appeal because readers that are not looking for your type of story are simply going to move on after reading your first chapter or just never become loyal.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

That sounds like the voiceover for a movie trailer - which can be effective.
What you want to do is introduce at least one main character, give a hint of the overall plot, and reveal enough twists to show you have a feel for where the story is going.
You also probably want it to be a little longer than that, but maybe not (some of mine are about that short - for example, my most successful story here has:

Kelly Morgan Pierce hit on a mobster's wife and should have died in that alley. Or at least been very hungover.
Instead, he is not - he has awakened in the body of a woman bearing his name, and with a life surprisingly identical to his own, aside from some major differences...

as the entire synopsis...).

 

[TheTaintedOne]

To me it reads like a run-on sentence. I would suggest take out the dialogue completely, and revamp the synopsis structure. Because I can't get myself to read the synopsis. If I can't understand your hook, then I won't read your story.
For example, you start with "In a world where crimson eyes are feared as the mark of an old witch and demons that once ravaged the land, Einar carries more than just a legacy of suspicion. Every night, he relives the death of a man he has never met, fighting battles with skills he should not possess, walking on land he had never known. His hands remember the weight of a sword, his heart longs for a woman whose face he cannot recall.". That is very long-winded and gives no real detail. I would like something like "Einar has crimson eyes, and for that he is feared. He is persecuted as the mark of witches and demons of old that once ravaged the lands." and stuff like that. More sensory details, show-not-tell, that kind of thing.

Thank you for the suggestion, it would be helpful for me.

I’m pretty new so I’m not sure if I’m qualified to say this, but a tip is to give a lot of info about your opening chapter and general story in your synopsis. Kind of like a spoiler. It probably sounds weird if you’re new, but it hooks readers that are actually interested and keeps away those that aren’t. Don’t try to make your synopsis generally appeal because readers that are not looking for your type of story are simply going to move on after reading your first chapter or just never become loyal.

I get it that providing some strong hook for the reader. I will work on it.

That sounds like the voiceover for a movie trailer - which can be effective.
What you want to do is introduce at least one main character, give a hint of the overall plot, and reveal enough twists to show you have a feel for where the story is going.
You also probably want it to be a little longer than that, but maybe not (some of mine are about that short - for example, my most successful story here has:

as the entire synopsis...).

I will look into your story for the help, thank you.

 

[BearlyAlive]

Just shorten the description until you only have the most important parts you want inside, then go from there.
Never explain or describe unless it's the setup for a punchline.
Make it catchy.

That's how I would do it.