?️ The Storm That Claimed Me - Feedback Request

[Deleted member 203972]

Hey fellow writers and readers!

I’m M.G. Loretail, and I recently started posting my romantic fantasy story, The Storm That Claimed Me, here on Scribble Hub. It’s a slowburn, lyrical, magic-rich tale about a storm bride, a cursed Stormlord, and the unraveling of fate in a sky kingdom full of danger and desire.

? Looking for feedback on:

• Pacing (especially slowburn balance)
• Emotional impact of key scenes
• Whether the worldbuilding feels immersive without info-dumps
• Any moments where the tension or clarity dips

? Quick Summary:
She was offered to the sky.
She was supposed to disappear.
But the storm chose her for something else—and now it won’t let her go.

? Start here: [Chapter 1 Link]
? I’d love any thoughts, reactions, or even constructive critiques!

If you’re also a writer, happy to return the favor—just drop your link below!
Thanks so much in advance ?

 

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u didnt have to use ai to ask for feedback

 

[Fairemont]

The story is written in an identical style and voice to the last three off these feedback requests Ive looked at.

I'm starting to get paranoid. Either all of these authors are the same person, or they're using the same LLM to edit or generate these stories.
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Anyway, my general assessment of the story, prose etc., is that it lives up to the slow burn dramatic feel you're going for.

It really, truly felt like nothing happened in the first five or so chapters I burned through. The story is heavily relying on the gravitas of the prose and dramatic descriptions more than anything else.

My link is in my signature.

 

[SurfAngel_1031]

The story is written in an identical style and voice to the last three off these feedback requests Ive looked at.

I'm starting to get paranoid. Either all of these authors are the same person, or they're using the same LLM to edit or generate these stories.
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Anyway, my general assessment of the story, prose etc., is that it lives up to the slow burn dramatic feel you're going for.

It really, truly felt like nothing happened in the first five or so chapters I burned through. The story is heavily relying on the gravitas of the prose and dramatic descriptions more than anything else.

My link is in my signature.

You make a very good argument for your assessment about it being the exact same. The way the request for feedback is, wow. I felt like I saw a clone.