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Hmm... Can't say this is a good look mate. Whining on the forums because you posted a story publically on a site that both allows and encourages reviews and comments? Makes me want to review it. Too bad you deleted it... Oh, wait, what's this? A sketchy site that uses crawlers...? Well, looky...

Since it was me who said that to you, well one of the people, I feel like I should at least try and offer some advice... I didn't realize you were dealing with that when I said it, so sorry about that. Try and find something you have a passion for. When you talk about that to someone, what...

Typically, you don't want the third-person narration to be stylized. You could get away with stylized narration by shifting to the first-person perspective, but that would be very time-consuming and would introduce a bunch of its own problems. A good example of a book with stylized first-person...

I don't have any stories posted for you to give feedback on, but I read the first chapter. Your premise is interesting, but I would suggest re-thinking your edit process. These are, of course, your first few lines. I'll post edited versions along with comments on the edits, so you can get an...

It would depend. If Thomas is a naturalist, I would say he should like/care about/ be interested in everything. If he is a zoophilist, then just animals. He would likely appreciate plants in so far as they serve to feed animals, but wouldn't really look at them as anything more.

Don't confuse Stoicism with lack of emotion. From Google: A Stoic (one who practices Stoicism) still feels emotion. They still suffer and feel, they simply work to avoid showing it. I would have to think a bit harder about this, but off the top of my head, Uncle Iroh (Avatar The Last...

Absolutely, I'll even throw out a quick bit of advice here as a peace offering. You might already know, but if you change the order of your chapters too soon after updating the story, it messes up your ranking in the "recently updated" section. I say this because of your intention to leave the...

I was actually planning to take notes, but after the third time I stopped and just marked it down as "dialogue is a bit stiff". These are the sections that I saved though: This makes it sound like Sonara thinks non-binary people are the devil. A better way of getting this point across might be...

I went ahead and read and reviewed Dark Hero of Music. I will refrain from doing Villainess, as I would not be willing to ignore the early chapters as you asked. While the review has not yet been approved, here is what I said: I rated a 3/5.

Ok, now I have spent a bit of time analyzing this. And I have a couple of things to refute. Paragraph break, this is a new topic. Paragraph break, this is a new topic. The above is also a major issue with your story. That is what I meant when I said that "Paragraphs often address too many...

The same way you do on every forum. Then on the next screen, Put my username where it says "Username", Subject, body text, "Start a Direct Message" And fine, I'll retract "Temper Tantrum" as well, and go with "seething".

I haven't written anything, and my profile is private because I don't need people snooping through it. My account was made explicitly to comment and rate on a diffirent story, but when I saw how this guy was refusing to accept criticism on their original thread, I decided to leave and review so...