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We get quite blind while writing and reading our own stuff, so new eyes are always appreciated !

Oh, my, gosh. Love the feedback ! Lots of things I haven't even thought about. 1) gonna try this 2) I start with the character name in this chapter to show whose POV it is, as the previous one was another person's, and before that the POV was in first person (MC). I thought it would be...

sorry about that, mixed up the links nearly gave you my whole book haha

Got some feedback on a scene and need to know which version flows better, is the least confusing, and captures the "best" vibe. https://ellipsus.com/read/3LtV2orNpctCNiysh8Itv3/chap-47-diff Thanks in advance ! (All feedback is welcome)

Italics ! Forgot they existed.

The next fad will be villainess-centric stories (no bias)

Aint a writer without beef with words Favorite: stupid Least Favorite: like a lie Underutilized: incessant Over utilized: like (comparison)

Does that count as POV-switching? I thought that was allowed as it is essentially a shorthand for: "Thanks," he thought to himself. I stole the style from a book I was reading Anyway, thanks for checking out the revised version. It flows much better now :blob_hug:

Ara ara, Shounen~

https://ellipsus.com/read/4FPpal9Gp84KrQAGBJBIF/Eric-shounen-2 The long awaited sequel ! I took your guyses comments in consideration but don't really know if I did it right? Cut out some unneeded exposition and a few filter-words. @Joyager2 would you like to check it out too? imma slep now

Nice, I got the vibe down at least :blob_joy: I may have shot myself in the foot by only taking a snapshot of a larger chapter. In actuality, this scene is only filler to lure the reader into a sense of normalcy(?) before the main plotline takes over again. Not to say that I shouldn't uphold...

(Oops forgot to mention that this was a snippet in an ongoing story, to add some lore to the side character(Eric).) Did not expect such and in-depth feedback , love it ! :blob_popcorn: Reading the text again with your comments in mind, I have to wonder why I didn't catch those types of...

Did you send feedback? Didn't get to see it. You don’t have to worry about harshness as honesty is more important for me. Can't only have glazed donuts can we? Anyway, thanks for taking the time to read it !

That's the question innit? Anything works haha But to be precise, I would like to know if the scene captivates a typical shounen/action vibe. If the conversations are easy to follow, i.e. whose line it is etc. And if the scenario makes sense so to speak?

Heya ! Thought my ongoing story needed some spice so I ended up writing this one action scene. Would appreciate to know what you guys think about it. (shounen is the bane of my existence) :blob_catflip: There may be some out-of-context exposition, but just ignore it haha...

mmh smut, I dare say my secret account got some views...

Does it work? My tumblr doesn't seem to get that much traction

Nooooo wasn't it just year of the rabbit?!

A cuppa tea. Got some fancy sencha tea from a local teashop