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Hello, everyone. Thanks again to all the cats who replied and gave advice. I considered as many points of view as I possibly could, but the reality of finding an artist who could match my vision for less than 500 USD proved kinda difficult. Compromises had to be made. My book is now complete -...

Eff it, I'm down if anyone wants to do a good ol' fashioned swap. Let me know how much you're willing to read and I will do the same - within reason, of course! :blob_happy: I try to be fair and give balanced reviews, pointing out the good and the bad of each work, and would expect the same of...

Hey, if you've still got enough left in the tank after all these epic roasts, why not look at one of mine? First, I got Ferdie. The forum already carpet bombed the cover, but someone still needs to do the actual content. In particular, I could use some help with the first chapter. It's pretty...

Yo, this is pimp tight!

I've tried to set this and that goal, but the rubber band always snaps back to an average of 3000ish. I'm drafting a journaling-format side project with about 500-800 words each for fun. Curious to see what happens!

You can do it. Stay based and keep writing.

My feet would turn into thrusters and rocket me straight to the moon if I had numbers like that. I remember seeing you on the front page there for a while!

I read the first chapter. First off, I really appreciate the dialogue-rich storytelling here. It seems like to made a good effort to avoid making walls of text. It made it easy to read. Unfortunately, there are many spelling and punctuation errors, but this is nothing that a bit of grammar...

Yeah, I really tried to give this a chance, but I can't continue. The best thing I can say is that it just couldn't grip me. I mean, I feel kind of bad for not being able to care for the plights of these orphans, but I just don't. Like Tempokai, I guess I just don't get what's at stake here or...

My view is that systems are pretty much window dressing. Like magic in regular ol' fantasy, you put it in there because that's what the audience expects. A based and skilled writer will go a step further and make their system a key part of the plot. For instance, in Final Fantasy VII, materia...

I don't think they're gonna stay friends, though. And, by the gods, that cake is horrible. It looks like that manic poured corn chowder all over it. :sick:

I'll let you know when it happens. Should be any day now! :blobrofl:

No, it's not bad. 3 stars is not bad - it's average. Or maybe balanced, in your case. The story's compelling points are gimped by the bad points. I actually wanted to give it 3.5 because it's unique and has potential, but SH wouldn't let me. Light novel or no, you gotta tight up your craft if...

Review posted. Basically, I think the story is very unique and stylish, but it might be hard to relate to for most readers. Polish your traditional storytelling conventions, and I think you will do really well going forward. Also, I would ax the Twisted Thoughts chapter and jump straight in at...

Based. I'll read it tonight and post my thoughts when I think I've read enough.

I can take a look if you want, but I can't promise I'll read the whole thing. Would you like feedback in a private message, or in the form of a public review? I always consider the good and the bad, but I tend to be a lot nicer in public reviews. Here's mine. You don't have to review it or...

Maybe I will look up this thread again when I finish my novel this month. What's your fiction?

I don't use Spotify or condoms.

Yeah, I ain't tryin' to give you homework or something, but I think a nice prologue would make a world of difference. I know it did for mine - I held my cards too close to my chest, and it made my MC totally unrelatable. But after a good, emotionally intense prologue that showed my hand a...

So, I checked out your book on RR. Read about 8 chapters. I thought the premise in the blurb had a lot of potential to be fun and intense, so I gave it a go. Even though I'm not a really a fan of in medias res in books, I thought dropping into the action right away was cool, especially since...