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Thank you very much for an insightful and actual sandwich critic! That's very much the reason why I posted it instead of drafts to receive feedbacks and now, I can see the repeating pattern of my shortcomings! This is my first time writing a novel and let me say that you're very perceptive. I...

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/88741/symphonia-rebel-against-the-world-of-machines Here's mine. Although It's not really polished well because I'm planning to migrate it here in SH after I'm done with this prologue. The latter half of the sypnosis isn't present in the story yet as well...

Thank you! This is actually what I need. I am glad that you liked my characters. This is still the whole prologue thing so I guess after I finish the end. I'll definitely focus on revising and polishing it when I post it here in SH.

Thank you for the feedback. To be honest, this is my first experiment in writing. The first and second chapter is actually introduction of the world through series of inside world references. It is narrated by a content creator inside that world so some of the quoted sentences came from the...

Unbelievably Unbelievably informative. A little unhinge, but served the purpose. Thank you for such detail dear friend. It really helps a lot seeing my shortcomings here.

Wasn't aware by that. Alright will do.

First thing first, I wanna celebrate the fact I've reached the climax of my prologue. But now, this is the first hurdle to face. Writing an arc. In this arc is where my other half of sypnosis will be introduced. I already know the progression of how: >I'm going to introduce the end game...

It was hell. Not just any other hell. It is hell made from strings, threading a crimson singularity that is shaped as a red spider lily. The threads of this beautiful flower are forged from amalgamation of tendons and muscles, breathing and twisting, yet gentle. At each path, there goes sinners...

I'm using it in my story. That part is still not up since I just wrote it 4 days ago. Robots who used the bygone history and figures of humanity to use their stories against them giving them massive existential crisis of surpassing their ancestors technology yet had never seen the space, and...

It is the most generic and yet always the best stories from mindkind. It gives us a sense of value and reflection of the worth of our actions in this world no matter how insignificant it is. Indomitable human spirit is what makes superman the greatest hero and the most boring one. Annihilation...

I will not refuse a review so here. Just started writing 3 days ago and I don't know if I'm progressing smoothly. I have 600+ total views and 60 average viewers so... I dunno. I'm resting today but hopefully you enjoy...

I greet it words that my lawyer won't let me finish.

Thank you very much! To be honest, with how much word count varied on each of my chapter, how tedious to keep proofreading, editing it out repeatedly, and cooking up the major plot event for my true story to start, the one I stressed the most over is actually the title ??? Thank you for the...

You got it. Of course I didn't mention the whole concept of this unique world mechanic of mine. Yes it is cyberpunk world so augmentations, and robotics are present but I have another surprise for my future readers about the musical androids so it also fits as fantasy sci Fi. You actually...

???? Yeah similar but the very concept of power and impacts are transformed into basic beats, your movement are notes and everytime your force was applied into the air, it becomes a melody, and if that force was transferred or expelled, it turns to beat. So yes. If you're in the battle, even...

Haha, thanks. Thank you for reminding me about this game after 2000 years who my old butt thought was the real Danganronpa. But this is interesting, I've never considered someone being tone deaf in my world. This will be dangerous for them since I applied a punishment for melodic dysfunctions...

If you live in a world where the rpg elements such as classes, interfaces which also obeys the logic of rhythm games to combat against murderous musical robots and against your government as well in everyday life, how would you like to live in this world? I'm introducing my cyberpunk dystopian...

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/88741/symphonia-rebel-against-the-world-of-machines I would like to know how I fair as well. What I'm writing is the prologue of the story so the other half of my synopsis will happen after the build up. In the first chapter you'll see immediately that it was...

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/88741/symphonia-the-world-of-machines-and-the-sleepless Well here's mine. Though you cannot see the full premise of what I'm trying to write yet because I'm writing a prologue so I'm still cooking up how I'm going to integrate that last half in my synopsis...

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/88741/symphonia-the-world-of-machines-and-the-sleepless Well, this is about a world where music becomes so revolutionary against the corpos and this fantastic artifact myth called "Starlium Gear" Which then later spawn those cold killer musical robots...