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Good day to you all. I need to know if the epilogue is readable (in terms of grammar), if there are enough descriptions, and if the characters' emotions feel natural from your point of view. If you have the time, please tell me your opinions:

Good day to everyone; I hope you are doing well. I'm learning how to become a writer and would appreciate your help. Could anyone please read this chapter and let me know: Are the descriptions detailed enough? Do the dialogue, characters' motivations, and behaviors feel natural? Do I overuse...

Sorry to bother you, but I need help. I'm finishing my current novel and beginning to work on my next story. Could you please tell me: 1) If the text is readable. 2) If I don't overexplain stuff. 3) How bad is the dialogue? 4) Is this a bad way to start a story or a not-so-poor way? 5) If...

Good day to all! I hope you are all healthy and doing well. If possible, I need opinions about: 1) If my dialogues sound normal. 2) If I give enough, too many, or not enough descriptions. 3) If my grammar is decent or awful. Here's the chapter for which I need the feedback...

Sorry to bother you. My current story has quite a few main characters instead of just one central one, and the narrative sometimes shifts between them within a chapter (for example from Szarel to Ruda and back to Szarel here https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1950602-overcome/chapter/1951750/ ). I...

Good day to all. I'm trying to learn how to write books and would like a second opinion, if you have the time. My common mistakes in the past have included over-description, drawn-out and unclear action, and unnatural characters. Can you tell me how bad or good it is here:

Good time of day, I hope everyone is doing well. If you don't mind, could you tell me if the character changed her mind too quickly about the benefits of anger in this chapter? (to avoid reading the entire chapter, use CTRL+F to find " pale orange hue " and then go until the end of the dialogue)...

Good time of day, everyone. Apologies for bothering you. I need pointers if the dialogue in this segment sounds unnatural or too repetitive or if it has any other problems. It takes place at the start of a confrontation between the main antagonist and the MC's leader. "King" and "Wyrm Lord: are...

Sorry to bother you, but I need your opinion on the knowledge dump chapter. Could you please tell me how awful it is and if the text is readable? (Takes place in chapter 7 and the entire 8th chapter).

Sorry to bother you, but I need a fresh perspective about my current side project. How bad are the dialogue, scene transitions, and action in this excerpt? Do I skip on description, or maybe overly describe things? Does my vocabulary come off as poor? Am I repeating words too much, or is it...

Good day to all. I'm learning how to craft stories (still in the very early phase of it) and need help. Some of the flaws in my stories were my over-indulgence in describing every detail and the unnatural, fake-sounding dialogues. If anyone has time, can you tell me if these problems still...

Sorry for being a bother, but I need guidance. I want to write at least one story in my life that can earn, in an honest way, 200 watchers on it and some comments. So far, no matter how hard I try, nothing works out in this direction, and each of my works is worse than the last. It feels awful...

Good day to you all. This time, I've decided to write a story in my native language first and then translate it into English. Here's an excerpt from the beginning: I need to know: 1) If it is readable. 2) If I overexplain or overdescribe stuff. 3) If Ruda feels too scummy and Rustam is too...

Hi, everyone, Rookieqw is here. I hope you are doing great. I need help. I've been using AI checkers (no one reads my slop) for advice about style and grammar. In addition to the usual "Show, don't tell", "Expand backstory" and "Use more polite language" all four of them showed that I changed...

Hello everyone, I hope you are doing great. I have two questions. I am rewriting one of my works and I would like to ask something. My idea for the story was to play around with the theme that the MC has a reason to want revenge, and she has been training herself, trying to get as high as...

Sorry to bother, but I need your wisdom. Here's the brief situation. We have a tribe of mutants serving an empire in a world recovering from a post-apocalypse. The mutants prefer to live apart from normal humans to maintain their way of life. They use their own terms for things (cub instead of...

Good time of day to you all; I hope you are doing great! Sorry to bother you, but I have a request if you have time to spare. One of my major flaws as a writer (besides overuse of showing when telling could be enough) was that my dialog sounded alien and unnatural. If it's not too much to ask...

Good day to you all, I hope you are all healthy and doing great. Sorry for being a bother, but I need fresh perspective, if you have time to spare. Could you please read these two chapters: https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1042505-hordedoom/chapter/1093034/...

Good day to you all; I hope you are doing well. If you have time to kill, can you please: 1) Tell me if my writing is understandable (I am not a native English speaker, so please be harsh here). 2) If it is too dry and/or if I am overusing certain words.. 3) If I over-explain things. Here is...

Hello to all, I hope that you are doing well. One of the main problems with my writing was glacial pacing and too much showing versus telling, which dragged the plot to a halt. If possible, could you tell me if I have gotten better or worse in this department based on my latest chapter...