Got some feedback on a scene and need to know which version flows better, is the least confusing, and captures the "best" vibe.
https://ellipsus.com/read/3LtV2orNpctCNiysh8Itv3/chap-47-diff
Thanks in advance !
(All feedback is welcome)
Heya ! Thought my ongoing story needed some spice so I ended up writing this one action scene. Would appreciate to know what you guys think about it.
(shounen is the bane of my existence) :blob_catflip:
There may be some out-of-context exposition, but just ignore it haha...
Helloz everypeeps ! I'm publishing my first chapter of my Otome Isekai that I worked on instead of studying.
This novel was inspired by korean manwha/webnovels such as:
I'm a Villainess, Can I die?
A Painting of the Villainess as a Young Lady
Resetting Lady
How to Win My Husband Over
Roxanne...