Search results

7/10

Sure no issue, just take your time.

Hi, Lets swap review, I will drop mine detailed review on your story in about a day. Here's my story. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1749236/the-dragons-blood/

Hey! I’m looking to do a review swap with anyone who’s willing, maybe like a 5 Chapter review? I’m interested in reading dark fantasy, but I need to stipulate that I won’t read anything with LitRPG elements or Isekai. Nothing wrong with those, just not my preference. I enjoy series like A...

The world is filled with ambitious people; some have small while others have big. But they all do.

Thanks for the suggestion. I will be rewriting this chapter again and will look on the short sentences and second sentences mix to keep the effect of immersion and tension. As for my focus was mostly on the transition in this chapter and didn't made any changed to other parts much. My writing...

I see:unsure::unsure: Looks like I overdid a little bit. You added the first 2 lines with a comma to keep the flow. Thanks for helping me. I truly get it now, why people say that writing a whole book is easier than writing a proper synopsis. For why I wrote a little bigger is coz of two...

No pressure, take your time. :blob_aww:

Thank you for the tip. I would break it to create tension with small sentences. Hey! I have tried breaking the synopsis into small sections or sentences to create tension while ending it with better question. And used some strong words like 'reigned supreme' 'mortals' 'souls' 'uncovers'...

I mostly try to imagine the scene in my head first and try my best to make it more hard for our mc, like how can I make him lose... Something like that. Though fight scenes are not my speciality or experience with, but this is how I mostly try writing it for the first time and then again and...

Here's the synopsis for my epic fantasy novel. I have tried to establish the core character conflict in this character-driven synopsis with cta in the end. The title for the story is 'The Dragon's Blood'. With the help from last thread I was able to fix few issues and created the new one...

I would appreciate it for you to read my novel. It's epic fantasy with dark theme, if you love show burn with raw emotions, then you would probably like it. Name: The Dragon's Blood https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1749236/the-dragons-blood/

Thank you for the suggestion, it would be helpful for me. I get it that providing some strong hook for the reader. I will work on it. I will look into your story for the help, thank you.

Here's the synopsis for my epic fantasy novel. I have tried to establish the core character conflict in this character-driven synopsis. The title for the story is 'The Dragon's Blood'. Any tips would be much appreciated, from world-level conflict to side plot conflict. Note that for Einar...

Thank you for providing me with feedback, it really helped me. As for the youthful perspective, there is a reason for me to go that way. It's to show his mature side, other than the dream, he already had a rough and tragic past. You have caught it well with the narrator's voice. Those things...

Thanks a lot for reading it and providing feedback. I truly was in fear that why a reader would read my story if they had an issue connecting to the narration swap from the first chapter alone? Yes, traditional readers would understand it, but some would have an issue. But your feedback...

I need help with Chapter One of my story. Previously, there was an issue with the reader getting into the story from the transition from third person to first person. Before, they were different chapters, but now I tried to sharpen the transition while putting them in one chapter. Even add a...

Previously, there was an issue with the reader getting into the story from the transition from third person to first person. Before, they were different chapters, but now I tried to sharpen the transition while putting them in one chapter. Even add a mystery to the first part of the scene where...

I don't know if it would be any help coming from me as I am new to fiction writing too, having been in it for one year and so. -A small recommendation would be to use these gestures, such as 'sigh', 'cough', and others, it would be better to show than tell in the dialogue. It would even add...

Thank you for the wonderful review and for pointing out every detail while also providing a recommendation for improvement. Yes, for the prologue, it would seem a little out of place if you read to the next 2 chapters, like a sudden shift in the story. And yes, like you suggested, I have tried...