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  1. 3QGN73

    Another new author looking for feedback

    Misunderstandings are not a main focus but they are there. More like a "poor/no communication kills" type. Think of it more like google translate just for speech instead of written text and a few thousand years of extra time to work out some grammatical kinks. Think of it how in japanese...
  2. 3QGN73

    Another new author looking for feedback

    Yeah, that requires a bit more thought on my part. Said woman wouldn't be able to notice him saying it wrong, they are basically talking through an auto-translate system. Eh, I'll just change it and then address it when that plot detail finally goes off.
  3. 3QGN73

    Another new author looking for feedback

    If overabundance of line breaks are the worst crime I've committed I take it. The author note about mishearing - I don't really know how to handle that. If I leave it where it is it breaks the flow. If I remove the note it is likely to confuse the reader; did I suddenly change the name or did I...
  4. 3QGN73

    Another new author looking for feedback

    First time writing, english not first language, yada yada. Critique away. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/450777/deteoh--a-glitched-worlds-isekai-story/
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