Try rewriting your synopsis and maybe rename the earlier chapters. The first half of your synopsis says nothing and might feel off. And "Prelude" sounds like a lot of unneeded info-dumps. I can see a lot of people have a negative first impression when seeing that. Getting people to open your first chapter and read it is the hard part :-/
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LostLibrarian
Sadly I don't have the time to look at it in more detail (don't even have enough time to write my chapter :-/ ), but you should try such easy things first before giving up...
BenJepheneT
it took me 7 full months to get 50 readers. you only started barely 2 months ago. have patience.
Assurbanipal_II
I agree with Bene. Patience. 
And start writing harems and dumb down your writing. It will help.
And start writing harems and dumb down your writing. It will help.
BenJepheneT
put a cute girl on the cover. works wonders.
Assurbanipal_II
Or the big boobs strategy. Both are recommendable.
D4isuke
@LostLibrarian It's not an info-dumps, but something about MC's orginal story as the empathy of his original personality.
@BenJepheneT Oh okay, I guess most of us experienced this also.
@BenJepheneT Oh okay, I guess most of us experienced this also.
Assurbanipal_II
But on a more serious note, simplify your writing, D4isuke. It will help you immensely.
D4isuke
Simple words ain't enough for me
Assurbanipal_II
Too many mistake simplicity for lack of complexity and quality. I have read a few chapters of yours, and you suffer from a lack of clarity. I didn't demand simple words, but simpler writing. A clear language is the sign of a clear mind.
More paragraphs. More commata. Shorter sentences. Less clauses to make your sentence structure less clunky.
A clear language is the sign of a clear mind.More paragraphs. More commata. Shorter sentences. Less clauses to make your sentence structure less clunky.
D4isuke
Ok, but I still found lost whenever I try to find mistakes. I can't even comprehend the mistakes within every chapters.
Assurbanipal_II
You see, when you find yourself lost in your own chapters, how is a reader then supposed to comprehend them? Do you see the issue?
You see, when you find yourself lost in your own chapters, how is a reader then supposed to comprehend them? Do you see the issue?
D4isuke
Can you even edit every chapter for me? If you can, I'll send you a link for you to put some suggestion. Try not to confuse or change the concept
Assurbanipal_II
Can you even edit every chapter for me? Lol, you know that is really a lot of work, editing.I am slow editor usually.
Just try to simplify as much as you can. I started out with a similar style like yours and gradually evolved to where I am now.
Read aloud to yourself what you have written. If it sounds good keep, if you cringe, discard it and try to change it.
Can you even edit every chapter for me? Lol, you know that is really a lot of work, editing.I am slow editor usually.Just try to simplify as much as you can. I started out with a similar style like yours and gradually evolved to where I am now.
Read aloud to yourself what you have written. If it sounds good keep, if you cringe, discard it and try to change it.
tiaf
Maybe rewrite your synopsis?
It doesn’t stick out between the thousand and dozen isekai stories here.
If I were to imagine it as a film trailer, I would see a depressive youth suffering. I would see people call him ‘threat’, but reason? None is given.
Ok, next is some voice telling him to change something and maybe something will happen to the world.
Maybe rewrite your synopsis?It doesn’t stick out between the thousand and dozen isekai stories here.
If I were to imagine it as a film trailer, I would see a depressive youth suffering. I would see people call him ‘threat’, but reason? None is given.
Ok, next is some voice telling him to change something and maybe something will happen to the world.