Why do I always think of my novel whenever you write stuff like that? Oh, right! It's because I'm guilty of all those problems.
Yeah but do you end a paragraph with dialogue and start the next with more dialogue with a different person in a different place?
Reddit said it was a story on royal road that got taken down for some reason, prob why it is hard to follow is combining chapters.
Though there is still a stub on SH so my guess is that it got nuked by RR, you'd think he'd leave a stub there too to funnel traffic to amazon.