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For run-ons, try to vary your sntence lengths more: short, medium long.
(Is this for fiction writing or technical writing?)

For speeches, try starting with the most important info points first, then support info later. Summarize important points at end.

Disclaimer: i am not a professional.

You did bother to reply. So thank you.

1. I am doing lightnovel/ webnovel style and try to be less on the infodump. Also, an example on short, medium and long?
2. Noted.

Listen. If there is any way to write a fictional paragraph, it's to keep changing the way you present things constantly using a variety of techniques. This way the reader doesn't fall into monotony. Technical writing is a bit different. There, clarity, concise and repeating patterns of writing are useful and expected. Parallelism. Harder to use in fiction, but most necessary in technical writing. The end.

Hope my amateurish example helps.^^^

My goal was to make each sentence different and also helps with varying sentence structure.

If every sentence is similar length, it gets boring. I once heard it described as similar to music.

I've also heard somewhere that in fiction writing you present the important info at the end of paragraphs.

I haven't personally mastered/understood that.

While in technical writing, one should make the first and last sentences the important bits.

can you write an example from your writing?

Short bursts of breaths as he thrusted with open palms in a solid horse stance, Dilan's exercise was at its midst with his audience consisting of occasional onlookers and rustling trees.

Time passed as the lamps in the park slowly dimmed with the rising sun and the sound of bustling chirped. Dilan then wrapped up with his last stance as he pulled his fists onto his waist, legs and back straightened and sucked in the enriched air greedily. He felt the tiny warmth pooling in his abdomen before it rapidly dissipated as though never there in the first place

Daniel thrusted with open palms in a solid horse stance, each strike accompanied with short bursts of breath. His exercise was at its midst, witnessed only by passing onlookers and the rustling trees.

I'm not sure how to put the changes into words

I did tried. By changing "as" into other words like "while" "with".

They are still connective words though.