Feedback On My Novel Series

StrideInTheNight said:

Hello, hello! I've spent about 5 or so years writing my own original series. I actually finished two books. I started on my third one mid last year, but I've never gotten feedback on them online. They've accumulated a little over 2k views all together, but I'm not sure what to take from silent views.

I'd be grateful for some feedback. Even if it's someone evaluating one chapter. Just tell me your honest opinion.

Gray Heroics: Book 2

A continuation of the previous book, Gray Heroics: Book 1. The world doesn't wait for heroes to be ready. In the aftermath of Book I, the cracks begin to show. Galivinth is no longer carried by raw potential or conviction alone. Powerful enemies, brutal losses, and widening threats force him...

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Rolanov said:

Hmm, i read chapter 1, but i don't know why it feels like fell flat mate.

I'm very easy person to be impressed, but this time, I didn't even catch the interesting plot. Also, I recommend you to change cover too, to make it more interesting.

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StrideInTheNight said:

Oh, I see. Thank you for taking time out of your day to give it a read. This does indeed help to know.

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Bane89 said:

Were you looking for feedback on book two specifically? Or would you be ok if I started with book 1?

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StrideInTheNight said:

Oh. Book 2 is fine. I think every chapter represents me as a writer, so there is no "wrong choice". I appreciate you considering it.

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StrideInTheNight said:

I'd be grateful for some feedback. Even if it's someone evaluating one chapter. Just tell me your honest opinion.

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This morning, without breaking what seems to be an unspoken tradition, Galivinth is wearing his usual fashion of a black hoodie over a black t-shirt, black fitted jeans, and of course his equally as black pair of converse sneakers. Naeth on the other hand is sporting a red and thin wool sweater with its sleeves both rolled up above his elbows. His multi-task device that resembles a thick leather bracer with a watch sewn into it on his right wrist, while a yellow thin rubber band loosely rests around his left wrist. On his legs are snow-white cargo pants that are tucked into the red shin-high steel-toe boots on his feet.

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"Oh, morning there. I didn't know you were going out today." Naeth remarks as the two stand before each other.

"Hey, man. I'm just going to the store to pick up some school supplies, is all." Galivinth responds as he tucks his hands away into the pockets of his jeans.

"School? I see. I hadn't thought to ask about your academic studies since meeting you..."

"It's not a big deal or anything. I mean, besides the fact that we can't hang out as much as we have been once I go back on Monday. You can come with me if you want. I've only got this one thing to do and then I'm probably heading straight back home." Galivinth tells him.

"Certainly. Though, I'm not quite sure why you attending school would prevent us from spending time together." Naeth responds. Then the two boys begin walking side-by-side toward their destination.

"Well, my classes start at 8:45am Monday through Friday, and school doesn't let out until 3:25pm. Then I have to get homework done, but after that I'm free to do what I want until 9pm. Which is when I have go to bed to rest for the next day of school." Galivinth explains.

"Ah, understandable. I... think? You'll retire for bed every night at 9pm? Seems like earthlings don't have a lot of energy."

"...Now that you mention it, I have noticed it takes me just about two whole days to get to the point of possibly getting some sleep. Which... wasn't really a thing before I met my dad. How long do you usually stay up for?"

"Typically, three earth days, but occasionally when I want to stay up even longer, I can just about manage four days before I finally tucker out." Naeth answers, earning a questioning look from his cousin.

"FOUR days? That's insane, dude... What do you even do with all that time you spend awake?"

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