Naruto story, About an Ex-ANBU teacher turned into Academy Teacher...

Indigodarkchild

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I have been working on this story for a while and would love to hear some thoughts on it.

Premise is simple. A semi-insert into the Naruto realm through a character that was brainwashed by Danzo. We navigate the world through his memories and see how he places an impact on the Konoha academy... starting with Uzumaki Naruto.

Link below. Trying to update on a Bi-Weekly basis.

The New Sensei <--------

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"So you wish to be Hokage… to be acknowledged… Admirable. But let me ask you this then…If I told you that I acknowledged you. Would that be enough? If everyone suddenly decided you aren't what they said you were, apologized and greeted you in respect, would you still wish to be Hokage?"

I stumped him. Good. There was a flaw to thinking that the Hokage was a symbol of acknowledgement. They were much more than that. They were the embodiment of sacrifice and the will of the village. They kept the village safe. If the intentions behind being Hokage were to be acknowledged, there were certainly other ways of gaining that acknowledgement. Starting a clan ( in the works) developing a groundbreaking seal or Jutsu ( which he later does) becoming undeniable in strength ( also checks that box) and a few more would provide acknowledgment. To be honest… If the future played out, he would be a Hokage, but a terrible father… Boruto and Himawari probably didn't deserve it. But when you are an orphan and your parents aren't around, how do you develop the nurture gene or experience? You don't. You learn as you go. Which is Naruto's strong suit and possibly his learning style. I couldn't blame his logic, but I can surely question it.

"I don't ask this to deter you. I ask this to strengthen you. A Hokage is more than being acknowledged. They are the strongest in the village, but also the most one others rely on. The one who has the best interest of the people they lead. They are undeniable in their strength and in their love for the village. You wish to be that, you need to change the way the village perceives you. So… I challenge you." With this I turned in my seat and looked directly in his eyes. I put my fist out for him to bump.

"Uzumaki Naruto, I challenge you to be the best academy student you can. I challenge you to read, study the history of all of the previous Hokage. Learn their strengths, their weaknesses, and determine how you can be better. Grow and train until you can no longer train. Ignore the haters. Fu- uh… forget them! Accept who you are and overcome everyone who doubted you. If you can do this. I will personally do all that I can to assist you in whatever you wish to be." I held my fist out. Watching his emotions. Waiting for his answer. I knew what it would be already. I can feel his aura churning, his feelings shifting through many things before ending on one.

Hope.

"You're on mister! I will be the greatest academy student in the world!" He fist bumped my hand and held firmly like I was a lifeline. Like I would disappear if he didn't hold on. Like I was the last hope. His last shred of hope. In many ways, I very well could have been. I would take that burden. To hell with canon. Let's have some fun! I felt his resolve. A bond was formed. I would see it through to my dying breath for this boy to be the best. Hokage or not.

Then I felt a pull in my mind… a strong pull…
 

Macha

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You have scam bots commenting your chapters. Report them. I hope you haven't let them take you outside the site to remove your organs yet.

As for the chapters itself, it's painful to read in mobile because of the long paragraphs. Break them down into smaller paragraphs. It will increase readability. And you should number your chapters.

Hope this helps.
 

FRWriter

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I asked myself. Why would scam bots target this story? 2 Chapters, barely any readers... but then I noticed it! No cover image.
They see him as an easy target, trying to sell him generic AI art.

Just insert a random ass cover, even if it's just a Naruto picture... you'll be left alone, I imagine.
 

Macha

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I asked myself. Why would scam bots target this story? 2 Chapters, barely any readers... but then I noticed it! No cover image.
They see him as an easy target, trying to sell him generic AI art.

Just insert a random ass cover, even if it's just a Naruto picture... you'll be left alone, I imagine.
Barely a reader? How high are you? 9 readers is a lot for a story with just 2 chapters and no cover image. Seems like the cover image is stuck in approval. It happens.

Sometimes there are no notifications when a cover is rejected you have to upload a different one.
 

FRWriter

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Barely a reader? How high are you? 9 readers is a lot for a story with just 2 chapters and no cover image. Seems like the cover image is stuck in approval. It happens.

Sometimes there are no notifications when a cover is rejected you have to upload a different one.

???

I just wondered why they targeted this story in particular, despite it being brand new. It's quite rare to get targeted by two scammers at once, just days after uploading your story.

My stories started out with far fewer readers; this was not meant as a judgment. As you said, 9 readers is a great start for a brand new story.
 

Indigodarkchild

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I asked myself. Why would scam bots target this story? 2 Chapters, barely any readers... but then I noticed it! No cover image.
They see him as an easy target, trying to sell him generic AI art.

Just insert a random ass cover, even if it's just a Naruto picture... you'll be left alone, I imagine.
You have scam bots commenting your chapters. Report them. I hope you haven't let them take you outside the site to remove your organs yet.

As for the chapters itself, it's painful to read in mobile because of the long paragraphs. Break them down into smaller paragraphs. It will increase readability. And you should number your chapters.

Hope this helps.
Thank you. I'll cut down the paragraphs. Never thought about how it would look mobile-wise.
I asked myself. Why would scam bots target this story? 2 Chapters, barely any readers... but then I noticed it! No cover image.
They see him as an easy target, trying to sell him generic AI art.

Just insert a random ass cover, even if it's just a Naruto picture... you'll be left alone, I imagine.
Understood. Adding an updated cover now.
???

I just wondered why they targeted this story in particular, despite it being brand new. It's quite rare to get targeted by two scammers at once, just days after uploading your story.

My stories started out with far fewer readers; this was not meant as a judgment. As you said, 9 readers is a great start for a brand new story.
Appreciate the feedback again. I had no idea no image would influence who reads the story. Will keep that in mind from here on out.
Barely a reader? How high are you? 9 readers is a lot for a story with just 2 chapters and no cover image. Seems like the cover image is stuck in approval. It happens.

Sometimes there are no notifications when a cover is rejected you have to upload a different one.
No, he was right. I had no cover image. Adding one now, waiting for approval as I type.
 
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