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    Feedback pls

    So the reason why I’m writing novels time to time is to train my English and improve my writing for exams lol… So I decided to publish some of my practice essays I wrote in my free time and want some feedback! (Disclaimer: it‘s academic essay, not a narrative story) I also play a lot of games...
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    Oh yay today is my first year anniversary! I would like to have feedbacks on my feedbacks so I...

    Oh yay today is my first year anniversary! I would like to have feedbacks on my feedbacks so I can give better and concise feedbacks in the future! Pls tell me whether my recent feedbacks have been effective bcs idk what I’m doing anymore! I don’t wanna mass produce feedbacks if I can’t grasp of...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Okie, you’re up next. - I read the story up to Chapter 3 and I’ve got to say, I finally had peace of mind. I read every word, and the language was fantastic!:blob_party: - The synopsis honestly didn’t do the novel any justice. When I first read it, I thought it’d be like any other story: some...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Alright, I have read your thread before and I’ll help you how you can get constructive feedback from the butler. - First, let it help you edit while keeping the originality of the text. Second, ask for character analysis, a breakdown of the content, and what to improve on. Yes, ChatGPT tends to...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Okie. A quick heads up,I don’t know anything about Star Wars ? - The whole story is so funny, especially the back-and-forth between him and the Imperial bureaucrat! The description of him hitting the JoJo pose, and the MC doing a whole mic drop, reminded me of the game Ace Attorney. - The MC is...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Okay good to know? I think the story idea is good and overall I enjoy it!
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Alright, your turn! - The synopsis is very interesting and philosophical. I suppose the story revolves around this concept of death! - [“the right the carry on”] should be “to carry on.” - Okay, I’ve read Zenomew‘s comment and I do agree with it. The flow of the chapter is kind of jarring. The...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Man sorry if I came off harsh. I was kinda invested and I spent a lot of time (around 2 hrs) reading each word. So I would get a bit heated up when I couldn’t focus on the narrative due to the writing. Your readers seemed to enjoy it so I hope you would polish it up! :blob_cookie:
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Hi, it’s your turn yay! - Before you read this, here’s something to consider: If you’re going to say English is your first language, this isn’t giving that. Please reflect on your work, and I genuinely suggest either hiring an editor or using AI tools to fix the grammar before publishing. -Okay...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    No no, it’s the exam season so I have to lock in ? I’ll do feedback whenever is possible but it will be very slow…. I’m juggling a lot right now:sweat_smile:
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Well, it’s your turn now! I read from Chapter 4 onwards. - I see a great improvement in your writing! Chapter 1 read almost like a poetic narrative, but from Chapter 4, it really starts to feel like a novel. There’s action, dialogue, and a unique world setting that all contribute meaningfully...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Help you make it sound like I’m operating a premium membership ?
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Hey… don’t be sad! It’s just that I like the story but I found the writing repetitive (got a bit too passionate)?
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Hi! I just read the first three chapters of your story, and here are my thoughts: - The cover is so appealing! Did you commission an artist to do that?? - The synopsis is general but clear about the storyline. It delivered the genre well and I think because the cover art is so good, I was able...
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    Want feedbacks from an amateur?

    Okay I wanna speed things up so pls react to this if you want your story to have feedback asap! I’m gonna skip people and prioritise those who are actively waiting!! (I’m also quite busy this month so I’ll do my best?)
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