Guilty as charged, I’m currently transitioning from screenwriting to novel writing, so some habits still carry over. I’ve also been leaning more into light novel structure lately, which might explain the rhythm and pacing.
I’ll definitely take what you said into account for the next draft...
Hi, I would love to have some feedback on mine, too if possible.
It's a story about a blacksmith girl running away from her arranged marriage in a Xianxia High Fantasy Coming-of-age story.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1572206/the-butterflys-blade-fantasy-xianxia--romance--comingofage/