Recent content by TheIcMan

Hell of a title lmao. I have read trails in the sky the third's final star door, nothing can faze me

Wait so did you want feedback on 1 or 2? If not 2, then you might wanna switch that link out in your original post

Yeah don't do that please

HMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM. Sus as fuck response right here boys. Can people stop letting AI talk for them pls lmao

Moo and beef. With a dash of milk. A love story.

^^ this The style is great actually yeah. It's just bogged down by word jargon soup

>me when fifty morbillion proper nouns appear in the first five paragraphs >Insert bocchi glitch gif Okay, seriously though, as usual take my words with a grain of salt and do not use them as end all be all for advice. I'm a pretty shit writer in my own right. So back to the start: You're info...

I'd actually like to comment on your synopsis. For once I decided to check it, mostly because of Eldoria's comment on the mature tag. And boy is it vague posting to the max. It's actually not that bad, but I'd like you to actually explain what that one small moment of courage is to make the...

Omegalul moment

Kamijou Touma combined with Katsuragi Keima?

I'm sad AI has replaced just generic grammar checking. You don't need any of the shitter llms to check if what you have is grammatically correct. Google docs does that for you. Also if you use AI to generate "ideas" then lmao.

Das my EW squad

Yes. The speed at which you read needs to follow the action and pace of the fight. ^ This is supposed to be the buildup to the climax, but it reads terribly slowly. There's an attempt at drama with "through his blurred vision, he saw a figure ahead", but it just reads corny. What I see is...

Yeah you're both lacking and overdoing it. You're lacking the actual tension and scene of the fight, and you're overdoing everything else. Web novel-esque prose is already short, so for action it needs to be incredibly tight and evocative. There's a lot of unnecessary words that extend the...

Ohh this is an AU. I'm not a fan of them 🥹 But honestly the way you write is engaging, and my personal preference in style. This isn't for me, but the little I read I did enjoy! Keep it up