Recent content by Sweetmeat

Here's my two main characters for Scion: City of Sin. I know you said to only post one at a time, but some pieces of one character are needed to fully understand the other. If that's not okay, feel free to just give an opinion about the first.

Thanks for the detailed feedback. I disagree with you in a few areas, but they're just matters of taste. For example, where you pointed out that you can't hear eyes rolling. Of course I know that, but the meaning is figurative. There was so much dismissal in his tone as he spoke, that he could...

I just posted the first chapter of a new story. Let me know what you think. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/930174/scion-city-of-sin/

You might be using language that's too formal. Try to make your narration sound more conversational as if you were speaking out loud. In regular life when people talk, they don't worry about using 'correct' grammar much. Slang, contractions, swearing, sentence fragments. All that shit works just...

If you can't get first sorted by rating descending, why not get first stored ascending?

They will attempt to kill each other. Because the copy knows that if they kill the original, they can assume their life. And the original knows that the copy has this plan.

My novel is on trending for the first time! Edit: Wait nvm, lol. It only showed on trending for me because I had fanfiction filtered out. So close.

Try my story! :blob_okay: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/897968/love-me-back-or-else/

It feels like a real nothing scene, as if the entire thing is filler. All that happens is she gets ready for a formal event, but we don't even get any insight into how Lily Bianca feels about the ball. She doesn't act excited or nervous. If anything she comes across as bored, but even then only...

I only use regional accents if the character's foreignness is an important part of their character. Less is more when it comes to that, you really only want to sprinkle it in subtly. However, I vary character voice a lot when it comes to word choice. For example, I have a scene where there are...

As both a venerable sex god and an amazing author, I think experience helps. That doesn't make it a requirement though.

In my opinion, interesting and likeable characters are the most important element to a story. You can have a mediocre setting and a predictable plot structure, and it will still be an enjoyable story if it has characters that you like reading about. But on the other hand, even if you have an...