Just read the review, so thanks for the input! I see what you mean about the second sentence. I was trying to take a kind of perspective of a third person narrator to introduce the book, so I have changed that part from "Surrounded by her close family, her partner, and her parents." to "She was...
So. I have 9 chapters and have finally reached the juicy bit. The posted chapters are mainly just the setup filled with hints and backstory that will all come into play later. I have something like over 600 chapters worth of content planned (if I keep managing to go off on tangents that actually...
I find the editing bit is not to hard, since I have written a lot of essays in the past for university I'm used to the 2am readthrough. The part I find tough is reading through the chapter with the readers perspective. Being a the writer, I know what I'm trying to say, I know the descriptions of...