Recent content by RustedFishbones

okok, tysm!

ah... I kinda... mash enter irl a lot as well...

I edited it, tried changing things to periods, commas, etc. Does it look fine?

okok so don't use them too much, its fine to use commas and spaces in between as replacements instead. But doesn't it "read/flow" different though if you use a comma instead of a dash?

Someone on Royalroad commented on my chapter saying that it had a "disconnected feel" to it and that it might be the dashes. Stating that it had an "AI feel to it". The dashes were used to make it "flow" better in a way that commas, periods, new lines, etc don't really do for me while I read...

Would using that be "better" or "flow" better than just third person without thoughts?

I do have a question though, in third person(generally) is there a reliable way in which it wouldnt look off to like…. Show “inner thoughts”?

I tried fixing it, prologue + first 3 chapters are all now third person :). I think it looks good and reads well now and it isnt constantly on my mind anymore. Thanks!

Yes, please help TOT Astreya Just kinda lacking confidence in POV things rn :/ (also action, I'm not too sure if I'm doing fine...)

Is it better to do third person or first person? I had someeeee confusion when writing my current story and I kinda started with first person for the first 3 chapters and kinda uhhhh.... switched to 3rd person after...... Was I wrong to do that? Or is it fine? I'm not really sure but at least...

ermmmm what about digging out still beating hearts outa ppl and offering it as sacrifices to a god(But like not super descriptive)

okok, i should be fine then prob, assuming that "Clive Barker-level" is more than just blood and sacrifice :DDD tysm!

How much is too much(to the point where I would need to do the content warning thing)? Like is talking about heart removal and blood and whatnot fine? Or do I not really need to worry about it unless its some kinda weird stuff.