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RRookieqw reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with
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Try writing from a limited third POV first. If your narrative can provide a limited third POV through the protagonist, it will be more... -
RRookieqw reacted to Playerkartik's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with Like.
So for the time above changes? and should I remove the description of Mc and all?
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RRookieqw reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with Like.
I actually have a lot of criticism... but I don't want to burden you with too much criticism. I want you to focus on solving the most...
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RRookieqw reacted to Playerkartik's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with Like.
So the issue is only with POV, right? For the old chapter I had got a review like MC is not really well explained So I added that...
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RRookieqw reacted to Playerkartik's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with Like.
Name - Shattered Skies: The Beginnings Chapter name: The Shatter
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RRookieqw reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread I'd really really appreciate a review(Chapter 1) with Like.
Dude... I don't understand why you wrote first POV and third POV in a chapter. What's your purpose in using 2 POVs in a chapter? It's...
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RRookieqw reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread What do you think of this character introduction? with Like.
Honestly, the first four sentences are descriptive narrative that slows down the pacing and isn't suitable for character (villain)...
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ROh wow it's very detailed. Too detail actually. For me i prefer something more snappy or compact on the detail. Maybe focus more on...
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RThis chapter was intense. I could feel Draa’s helplessness really well, and the tension was solid. The world is really creative—the...
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RRookieqw reacted to MFontana's post in the thread What do you think of this character introduction? with Like.
I figured that was easy to infer with the mention of his smirk, but a bit more clarity probably couldn't hurt. I appreciate the input...
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RRookieqw reacted to Sunsetinapainting's post in the thread I need opinions about a chapter with Like.
Is this the first chapter of So it's quite long. But anyways great description
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RGood day to everyone; I hope you are doing well. I'm learning how to become a writer and would appreciate your help. Could anyone...
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RRookieqw reacted to MFontana's post in the thread What do you think of this character introduction? with Like.
I've got a bit of the opening of The Elarian Chronicles: Duskfall (Chapter 3) typed up and would like some feedback on the presentation...
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RRookieqw reacted to Anemic_Vampire's post in the thread What do you think of this character introduction? with Like.
I'm not really good at giving feedback, but here I go anyway... :blob_cookie: Honestly, standing beside the big ork, the elf-like...
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RRookieqw reacted to MFontana's post in the thread What do you think of this character introduction? with Like.
Not good at giving feedback? That seems pretty good to me. And yes, you definitely nailed it on this bit too. That's dead-on for his...