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I've been thinking about Toy Story a lot lately, especially about how it manages to create tension during the scene moment in Pizza...

Most readers expect to see “I” used a ton in a first person story, so don’t ever beat yourself up if you see it a few dozen times in a...

So why not use the atmosphere to represent the character's emotion? This way, the environmental descriptions aren't just empty settings...

In the context of first POV, white space syndrome usually occurs because the author focuses too much on the character's internal...

I skimmed the rest of your chapters, and I think my main takeaway here is that lack of tension I mentioned earlier. Good storytelling...

Need a link dude.

My Appraisal: Well Done

Darkness took me, and I strayed out of thought and time, and I wandered far on roads that I will not tell. Also I was sleepy.

A werewolf who reviews takeout and their channel is called I'm Lycan It.

Oh... you're back. Your patient's been waiting for a long time, dude.

Okay, so many thoughts about this. Starting with "a man" rather than a named character isn't great because your opening should attempt...

... What a weird way to advertise your web novel

Trying to dodge the 'AI'/'mindless comment' tag, huh? Thanks for sharing this.

Recently joined user, and they've posted variations of this comment on a bunch of other works including the dreaded "lets continue this...

Casting characters to me is like saying Imma grow up to be princess when I was 4.