P.R.S

P.R.S

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  • Assurbanipal_II
    :blob_cookie: You are next.
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    I am glad for then, those chapters are the older ones made 1 year ago
    Even trought my writting style dint change the errors are much less likelly to happen
    (English not my first language)
    Assurbanipal_II
    Assurbanipal_II
    This is not a language question, i would say, but rather a concept one. Your work reads like a theatre script.

    Only dialogues and action beats. No exposition. No description. No dialogue tags who is speaking how. What emotions do they feel. What do they think. It reads like a soulless rpg.

    In writing, you have no stage to back you up. You need to paint everything with your words.
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    I mean the spelling errors

    About the way i writte, i prefer this way
    Sometimes when its needed the emotions will be told and yeah, the first chapter atleast until the 4th one are a kinda bad (rework on then) but the style i writte will stay the same nonetheless
    Thank you for your criticism, if you have anything more to say ill be more than happy to hear
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