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First of all, appreciate the in depth advice. I can see what you mean. From the time the chapter starts, there isn't a moment where something 'major' isn't happening. And, when you mention it, my descriptions of the actual surrounding were definitely lacking. Was he really that edgy, to...

That's a bias I never knew existed, haha. Me personally I always enjoy the rare prologue, but I can also see why that perception exists when you say it like that. I've read a few spoiler prologue but never minded them thinking the author would do something unique with it. I think that last...

Ah, I think I get it? So its moreso showing something away from the main plot line that still is impacting the story later on? Great analogy by the way, I'm someone who hasn't even watched nor read Lord of the rings but still could pick up what you're trying to say(I hope). I've also realised I...

Thank you so much for the detailed feedback. The [Redacted] actually wasn't for mystery, it's just the [Outer Gods]. I had thought by showing Frondeir think of them and have his mind attacked, it could be inferred that you had to think of them as [Redacted] to stay safe but looking back it's a...

Ah that makes sense. Thank you, I didn't think about the worldbuilding I needed to provide with the introduction. By surprise, do you mean Oracelus seeing the past regressions? Just asking because I hadn't intentionally written any 'suprise' elements. Thank you for the advice again. Sure, I'll...

I haven't gotten feedback on my writing before and thought it would be good to see where my mistakes are.

Illusory magic is top 5 magic. The two ways to write it would be either having the reader know the illusion is placed beforehand or make it a reveal. Both can be better at certain points, just depends on the context. Also is quite versatile in usage, being in senses or sight.

Capitalise on They all appeal to a specific niche of storytelling. Smartphone is just a self-insert, and it works well as one so it becomes popular

Follow the logic of Light Novels

The Fool's Gambit from lotm

Mix from novels you like always works since you can take in things that you liked, and so may like writing about

Sorry, I accidently sent multiple of the same thread. I'm not sure how to delete a thread either. @Tony Would it be possible to delete these three spam threads called accident on the feedback forum? I'm not sure if you're whom I'm meant to tag for this.

Sorry, I accidently sent multiple of the same thread. I'm not sure how to delete a thread either.

Extremely sorry that this got sent 4 times T-T. I'm not sure how to delete a thread.