Recent content by MortalWriter

Thank you so much for the questions! These questions show how underdeveloped the work is and that I had rushed to put words on paper. The story was in my head and I was able to observe the situations, but, as you noted, the reader does not observe the occurrences I had in mind. The work is bad...

Thank you for the feedback. From the web novels I read previously, I also found myself skimming a lot and skipping some sections entirely. Therefore, I had intended to write a story that would be read chronologically, with a protagonist who has to revise his own plans as the story unfolds. My...

Thank you for the feedback. I looked through the early chapters again and saw that my tenses were all over the place. I shall take down these chapters to edit, then repost once I have received more feedback.

Greetings everyone, I posted the prologue and first 11 chapters of the manuscript I have completed. There has not been many interested readers. Part of me feels that the chapters might be too long. Part of me is concerned that the story is not good. Anyone willing and able, please give the work...