Recent content by MFontana

Depends on the type of game-systems you're planning to integrate, but as far as published and released material goes... .hack Log Horizon

It's solid. The only suggestions I had, I believe I left for you in the critique I sent. If not, I certainly meant to, so I'll leave it here too. Consider the source of said prophecy. Who said it? Where is it recorded (if it is)? How is it recorder (if it is)? How do the present-day people know...

What era are we talking about? And in what scope? Full warfare? Individual wielders / duels? Era shapes technology, and from that, weapon availability. Scope also shapes the scale of weapon use. Individual-Based Halberds Pila (Singular: Pilum) Bec de Corbin War Scythe Large-Scale Scorpion...

Overall, no. It isn't too much when you're writing for print. As for uploading though, I'd still recommend splitting it into parts. For example: Chapter 1 part 1 and Chapter 1 part 2, and so on. I've had to do the same myself with The Elarian Chronicles, as both Chapters 1 and 2 were well over...

Thank you for the input. As for the "Orcs" vs "Orks" the decision didn't have anything to do with Warhammer, but it is true, that GamesWorkshop did opt for the same spelling for Orks in their setting. Also, thank you for taking the time to note that there is additional context beyond the two...

What's a "twilight" thingy? (If it isn't obvious, this is sarcasm. I also self-selected out quite early on for both.) But yes, overall that is the rough target reading level for Light Novels. [~Middle School to High School] Some Light Novels aren't that bad though. They make for easy reading...

Light novels aren't graphic novels (though many also feature character art inserts between chapters). They're novels that are typically quick and easy reads (Young-Adult Reading levels typically). Several popular ones are also rendered in anime format, and manga format as well though.

Thank you both for the input. The actions are coming soon enough, and I do have a clear mental picture of how to incorporate them into the descriptions (Like I also tend to prefer). I also do have a fair bit of dialogue drafted up for him, and will be incorporating a fair bit of the suggestions...

I figured that was easy to infer with the mention of his smirk, but a bit more clarity probably couldn't hurt. I appreciate the input, and will consider some additional revisions where they may be necessary, primarily to the opening paragraph. As for the specific color and references to the...

Good news, El. An Anti-Villain is still qualifies as a type of villain, so they are still a "Villain" here. The only true difference between the two is motivation. Villains (like The Joker) take a certain pleasure in their role. Anti-Villains do the Villainous thing for some misguided reasons...

I do read a few Light Novel series as well. That said, the style isn't really more about "telling" or "showing", but rather the execution and blend of both to create and sustain your pacing. The genre also will really help to shape the present ideals, however I would still encourage breaking the...

Seeing as how I've been working on the opening of Chapter 3 of Duskfall, and doing so introduces one of that series' main, recurring, antagonists it's gotten me thinking. Who are some of the most memorable villains my fellow authors here have created for their own stories and why were those...

From what I can gather, you have yourself a clear target audience. So the advice I'd offer is this: Write for your target audience. Don't waste time trying to please everyone, because that is an effort doomed to failure. What matters is whether your target audience likes your work. To be...

Not good at giving feedback? That seems pretty good to me. And yes, you definitely nailed it on this bit too. That's dead-on for his character archetype. The rest, that was all really helpful. It's your opinion, and sharing that helped me a lot here. More than you may even realize. So thank...

Beat me to it... but here's the meme anyway. See the meme? Do the meme. You SHOW it through present-day interactions. Maybe have one or both of them, or others who witnessed what happened from the outside, mentioning it in passing. You don't need to go into detail on the past events. If you...