Recent content by Maromar

Unless this is comedy, I feel like you can do a little more with this synopsis. It reads like a sarcastic Epic Trailer guy thingy and says very little about the actual story in a way that would tantalize a reader. The story itself seems to have the same problem, the sentences are all very...

Interesting. Normally, I'd say no. Killing is messy, especially when it has to be done through violent means. I do have my own compunctions against ending life but I also just really don't want to have to deal with a corpse or the disco cop the corpse snitched to. Whatever "retribution" you'd...

Any time where the action gets in the way of the other elements of the story, it's all a balancing act. Whether or not an action scene is gratuitous or not depends on how well the writer pulls it off, how many action scenes came before it, and how many plot points are being stalled for the...

How about Váthos? Agarath is Greek derived, I believe, and Váthos means "depth".

It's too late to turn back now.

Yes, unfortunately. Depending on the editor you get stuck with, "acceptable" work can range from a soulless, boring drag that leaves readers with what amounts to an initial promise to solve one problem only to attempt to sell a solution for something only tangentially related, to fun stuff that...

The brick evolving into a human/humanoid form wouldn't even be an issue to be honest. Rimuru and several popular non-human evolution protagonists return to monke sooner or later. The problem is that several authors execute their growth plots in the most boring manner possible, usually by only...

@BenJepheneT is right on the money here, if the MC can punch every punchable problem and win, one source of building intreasting narrative stakes is to give them a problem they can't punch. There's a scene in Final Fantasy 13 that encapsulate the technique pretty well. The party slaughters a...

Pretty basic premise, very on-brand for this cycle. I can't provide much feedback beyond that from just the premise though. I'll leave a few comments on the chapters as I plunge into Ahya. I do enjoy more socially reserved MC's though. All the self-rightous star children waving big vieny...

I'm intreasted in three things really: what you felt, what you enjoyed, and what made you consider dropping my work in disgust. It's very helpful to know your impression of any charecter, scene, or event, even down to little stuff like the way someone's clothes are described. Don't worry about...

You'll usually find more nationalism than racism, which is off-putting enough on it's own (read the later Mark Greany books if you want an American example) but the overt racism is there often enough to remind you that our rent free presence in some peoples' heads is strong enough to bleed into...

Green is my favorite color anyway.

Even if you tried your hardest to offend people, you'd fall short of how offensive some Chinese novels (and other Western novels for that matter) can be. If you want, you can get a sensitivity reader and proceed with conscious steps. It'll be enough. And if someone takes offence even after you...

The core of Wuxia lies in the translation of its name "martial heroes". A focus on super powerful/supernatural fighters with a magic system more directly influenced by Chinese myth and lore is as little and as much as many will ask. Typical tropes besides that need only apply as far as you're...

Yeah. Those who matter don't mind, and those who mind don't matter. That solid base you have is a foundation for future growth.