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Well, this is my feedback as a casual reader who only reads it once without repeating it. Overall, your chapter is more telling than...

you talk like chatgpt for one. all of this sounds inhuman out the ass. "you're so right--it's such a cliche!" ??? holy lmao. out of...

okay.. I'm not going to beat around the bush. But I also don't want to discourage you. Take what I say with a grain of salt. I'm in a...

Your boss doesn't really feel tough. You did a good job describing his appearance but I don't really feel his 'presence', primarily...

Thank you for sharing your opening. The atmosphere and imagery are very intriguing, especially the faceless figure and the golden card —...

Hello kind people. I've been writing in my free time for a few months, but I'm fairly bad at taking a step back and putting off the...

Doesn't seem interesting to me. What you are promising (at least that's how I felt reading the synopsis) is a bland MC, going around...

When reading a story, book, or the like, what are some of your favorite styles of openers? In Media Res (In the thick of the action)...

okay... go to the latin, its a prefix. pro- always means pro-totype, pro-logue. Pro is always first or previous. Okay, probably hindi...

I think you've put more effort here than was put into this story. Congrats.

Thank you very much, @Eldoria. Great help, as usual.

Well, in terms of visualization, the scene is good. I can picture this prologue scene in my mind. However, if you want to make the...

Greetings, comrades. I'm currently training my writing skills, specifically focusing on first chapters and hooks. I would love to get...

There's isn't a perfect formula. Personal I like to get my first chapters into the action to get the readers into the story as quickly...

It all depends. As a first chapter you want to draw people in, however, if you go to long it can get to cluttered. I guess all I can say...